There's a few grammatical errors in here, but otherwise, good job. :)
Darragh got one that I noticed, but when you're talking about the character's mother, it should be "mother's" and not "mothers' ".
It should be 'never were' not where. Where is a place. :P
You just need to work on the grammar.
i like this story alreaqdy..honestly..i effn hate fathers like that..so im hoping she kiks his ass off...
maybe try describing the emotions more than whats physically going on
Wow. Your a very good writer. For some reason I thought this was going to be supernatural or something like that, but it was so sad how she lost her mom and the way the dad treats her.
wow, I'm already loving this story. The flashback almost had me in tears :(