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Little Edward

Little Edward

150K Reads 3.4K Votes 37 Part Story
francesca By francescablackk Updated Jul 15, 2015

When Edward is turned into a baby, Bella finds herself in a terrible predicament. She becomes his sister as he forgets his marriage to her. According to Carlisle, he will only remember when he grows to seventeen again. But how will Bella cope when a girl named Emma falls for her Edward and they start to believe they are soulmates? And how long will Bella have to wait for her Edward?

DeadDemigods DeadDemigods Jan 14, 2015
I'm sorry but the description of Edward being a baby made me laugh and think "wtf is wrong with twilight fans"
Scribbles92 Scribbles92 Jun 11, 2013
Good but in my opinion it could do with more detail.  Especially at the end, rather than her just walking in and being told add some more detail. I can suggest something but won't tell you unless you want me to. I'm not telling you how to write your book it's just a suggestion.
Ninjapotato Ninjapotato Apr 12, 2012
I'm sorry its late at night, and the last sentence cracked me up. Yo husband has been turned into a baby child. Hahaha ok...not making fun but yeah, have fun with your story :)
WhoShotKennedi WhoShotKennedi Feb 13, 2012
Going along with basically what everyone else said: I like the plot. I mean, I don't usually read fanfiction much anymore because it's usually just a pile of senseless, predictable, redundant plots. BUT, yeah. Your descriptions need to step up, cuz they're as dry as a stale saltine cracker.
JaneKessel JaneKessel Feb 08, 2012
@JohnTalmondTheSecond I don't care if you win a million bucks, the author made a mistake, whatever, don't criticize just to be a jerk. Besides if you're mad then don't take it out on us.
JaneKessel JaneKessel Feb 05, 2012
@JohnTalmondTheSecond U realize they r incredibly fast and if ur gonna b sassy don't comment