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Luciola

Luciola

178 Reads 18 Votes 8 Part Story
Hatu Shipanga By Alzara202 Updated Apr 05, 2016

Set in the middle ages in the fictional Empire Of Holy Souviera. 
Alfonzo II , Emperor of Holy Souviera ,a powerful empire , filled with riches anf fertile lands and a peaceful nation. But how long will the peace last when the Emperor dies of illness? Most importantly who will rule the lands after him?  A power struggle begins between his power hungry wife ,his ambitious three legitimate children and his bastardized daughter  from a failed marriage: Luciola.

GemmaLawrence31 GemmaLawrence31 Dec 11, 2016
I like it! I think however that you should expand on this, more descriptions, slow the story down a little? voted
GemmaLawrence31 GemmaLawrence31 Dec 11, 2016
Good! If I were you though, I would separate out the dialogue from the descriptions, it will make the chapters clearer. voted
- - Aug 21, 2015
I love the way you write and the story is also good. Keep it up! :)