Welcome to Arcane's Critique Shop version 2.0!
"Critiques are perceptions."
√ Offers constructive criticisms and feedbacks.
√ Giving suggestions, corrections and advices to your work.
√ Neatness, Formality, Grammar are all a must.
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🎀 TITLE & BOOK COVER:
Again, I like it. Since nabasa ko naman ‘yung unang book, wala na akong masasabi pa sa book cover nitong The Antiquity of Us, as long as readable ang text, I’m fine with that. Series siya kaya may format ka na sinusunod. The title is yet again unique. Nice one!
🎀 BLURB & PLOT:
No joke, you’re good at narrating and describing things and you know how to play with words. Second time ko na na-critic ang gawa mo and I’m in awe again. Special mention to this line, A love favored by pouring rains, storms, expired hopes, and fleeting dreams. I like it very very much. :>
The plot is definitely intriguing and interesting. Having a complicated back story of the protagonist makes it more appealing to the readers. In short, nice plot you got there.
🎀 PROLOGUE:
People who could stomach saying ‘It’s okay’ or ‘You can just try again’…
》 People who could stomach saying ‘It’s okay’ or ‘You can just try again’…
When was the last time someone hugged me like this? It feels so long … and far away.
(I don't know, but the word far away seems off the sentence.)
Okay, I was again enjoying your prologue. Hands down sa paggamit ng descriptive words, hindi lang sa English pati rin sa Tagalog. I thought your prologue was an introduction-ish type kasi chill lang ako no'ng binabasa ko siya and then boom, the last sentence caught my attention. Very well!
🎀 NARRATIONS AND DIALOGUES:
Yey, you never disappoint! As usual, on point yung mga words, like really. I like how you describe the scenery, weather, clothing, etc. Kahit mata o bintana galling nang pagkaka-describe! Minsan feeling ko may background ka in terms sa writing or baka magaling ka lang talaga magsulat. Plus, again nice one sapag c-cut ng mga chapters. Natatawa or nagugulat na lang ako kapag nababasa ko yung last sentence of every chapters.
Dialogues are realistic and hindi awkward. Hindi rin nakakalito kung sino ang nagsasalita kaya ayos naman.
🎀 CHARACTERIZATION:
Iowa [Ionna] Linarez, slight complicated character since gawa rin nung plot. I love a protagonist with flaws and seeing them change and learn things makes me want to read it. Nakakarelate yung character niya so ayos na 'yon. Nice choice of names, by the way.
Atlas Ysaguirre, I love the surname, ang unique. So akala ko siya 'yung type na cold and masungit (napakita naman siya sa mga unang chapters) though nagiging playful siya sa ibang scenes kaya I'm not sure what’s his personalities. And masiyado siyang mabilis, galawang f'boy chour. Anyways, kinikilig rin ako sa ibang scenes.
Hoping for character development!
🎀 MESSAGE FROM THE CRITIC:
Thank you for making me enjoy your novel. I swear, you’re good enough and sobrang taas ng potential mo as a writer. Just keep on writing lang! Wala na ‘kong masabi eh, kaunting errors lang talaga. Thank you for choosing our shop!
