Mystical May Contest

~Vampire/Werewolves Results!~

Username: lexinewman2020

Title: The path to freedom

Total: 82

Review: This was amazing! I love the surprise when you found out their mates! The first chapter was so good, but I feel like the rest of the book lacked the emotional connections that it needed. Some descriptions would have been nice. The punctuation was excellent but you misspelled some words. And the synopsis was good but I feel like it was lacking the true meaning of your book. I'd really just try to work on description and being able to tell what the characters are feeling or experience. Make me feel like I'm apart of the book.

______________________________________

Honorable Mentions:

Username:vivahannah

Title: I am Catalina

Total: 79

Review: You started off really strong with the first chapter and how you explained how she became what she is and all of the pain and the difficulty she and her parents felt through this. And you really made me understand how hard it was for her to have to live with what she does and how hard she fights the bloodlust. The spelling was almost perfect you had some grammar issues with commas, periods, but overall it was well done. Descriptions were nice I was able to feel like I was her feeling what she was feeling. But as the story went on the chapters kind of lacked the emotions and the rawness that early on in the book you had. The synopsis wasn't very explanatory about all that the book is about. The cover had a good connection with what the story was about. It's a good book, you just need to make sure when you're explaining what's happening that you do it with more details.

________________________________________

Participants:

Username: adretaRyder

Title: The Frozen City

Total: 65

Review: Your book is legit. I love the characters, the plot, setting, everything! As awesome as your book is, it needs some improvements. Your cover shouldn't be only about your MC, it should also include things about the book. Your blurb could also use some mystery, something to make it more captivating. You tend to have plot holes which can be due to the lack of planning, I suggest you focus on that! Moreover, broadening your reading experience can aid your sentence structure as well.

_________________________________________

Username: 1-800-choke-that-ho3

Title: Not so normal

Total: 62

Review: The book is good but everything happened so fast, there was no wait or pause between one scene to the next. I would try, trying to have a wait and slow down when everything happens and work on better descriptions. It's a good start it just needs some touches and edits to make it better. Also, I would go back and explain what happened with Kota and kris, and with the first chapter it was good but the book didn't really have the aspects of the synopsis. Try making sure that your length out everything that's happening but it was a good story.

__________________________________________

Username: 7bookworm23246

Title: Teen avengers and a vampire

Total: 59.5

Review: Your story needs improvement. I'm saying it to help you. You need to try and give more thoughts to your story. The whole book was confusing. You need to base a plot and connected your chapters with the others. A story comes to readers' attention when you focus on certain events based on a plot. There were quite a lot of punctuation errors and there were spelling errors. I think what you need to do is come back stronger to really make sure to find something that you can explain in deep detail, so no facts leave unstated. Edit books and try to find good descriptive words. Please keep striving to do your best! You can do it!

____________________________________________

NOTE: WINNERS AND HM! PM ME YOU EMAIL FOR THE STICKERS!

Any queries? Ask away!

Typed and Edited by BlizarrKaneki

Your host,

JuniaAvery29

<<___________>>

Credits of the sticker and poster go to LagendaryReaper