Title: Things We Lost
Author: Madisueb
Genre: Fantasy, Gods
Cover: Interesting. I like the colors and how it seems to flow.
Summary: Interesting. I really like it.
Chapter 1; Things We Got:
"Although you day wasn't a fourth the size of mine!" Is Luke basically trying to say was bigger?
"He was a quick thinker and sharp and skilled with his words." I would re-say this differently; make it flow better.
What do you mean by Mike took over the stand?
I felt like you explained a lot for when he was heading back to the mansion, but not while inside the mansion. Also, what does his dad look like? Does he look like a natural evil man or not?
Overall rate: 3 💙💙💙
Everything is really good. I just feel the second half of your story was laking something
Rating Scale: Rate from 1-5
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1: Poor/Needs MAJOR editing
2: Almost there/ needs fixing/need practice
3: Good/Needs a little editing
4: Good/Needs a little editing/may recommend/may read on
5: EXCELLENT/will recommend to followers, friends/may read on
