Title: thunderstruck (TLOU.)
Author: llimerence
Genre: Apocalypse, girl x girl, love, zombie
Cover: I like it. It says the main character is bold and it's a girl.
Summary: OMG, the cast. I really like your summary. It's nice and sweet and straight to the point.
Prologue: What is a loo roll? In the second paragraph you mention 'he', but who is he? What is plait? Explain why Jae was teased. I know the GIFs show us, but these are keen in a story.
Twenty Years Later: Good, but what does everything look like? Does Jae have black hair? Blonde hair?
Overall rate: 4 💙💙💙💙
This story has potential. Will I read on? No. I'm not keen on stories about apocalypse and girlxgirl.
Rating Scale: Rate from 1-5
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1: Poor/Needs MAJOR editing
2: Almost there/ needs fixing/need practice
3: Good/Needs a little editing
4: Good/Needs a little editing/may recommend/may read on
5: EXCELLENT/will recommend to followers, friends/may read on
