Critique: Drowned

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Title: Drowned 

Author: TheImperfectLife

Genre: Horror, Murder, Revenge, Suspenseful 

Cover: OMG, it's beautiful, but I don't like how I have to squint to see your name. 

Summary: I like it, but are you saying that the lake has a curse? In which the curse brings people back to life? You should say a little bit about the curse. 

Chapter 1; Drowning: Everything is good. Sentence flow, grammar, and descriptions. 

"I could never do what he once did."

"The moon reflected off the still lake giving  off a shimmer of light."

Chapter 2; Bad to Worse: This is the most suspenseful story I've ever read. 

Chapter 3; Safe?: Don't forget to tell us who POV it is. Sorrow and grief is basically the same thing. 

Is the 'Another life' a legit another life? Or a flashback? 

Chapter 4; Somewhere Over The Rainbow: Again POV.  Oh, SNAP!!

Chapter 5; You Shouldn't Have Done That: POV again. WHAT!!!

Overall rate: 4 💙💙💙💙

Besides your summary and the little things I pointed out above and in the comments; your story is golden. It's so suspenseful and intriguing. 

Rating Scale: Rate from 1-5
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1: Poor/Needs MAJOR editing
2: Almost there/ needs fixing/need practice
3: Good/Needs a little editing
4: Good/Needs a little editing/may recommend/may read on
5: EXCELLENT/will recommend to followers, friends/may read on

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