Author: IcyMist_
Category: Mystery/thriller
Before:
There's nothing wrong with your cover. But like I usually point out for the benefit of doubt, a cover looks more professional with your real name instead of your username.
Your synopsis is good. Although, it has typos that can suggest to readers they should be expecting likewise in the book.
After:
"I sit.." Change sit to sat because your writing in past tense. You did something in your first paragraph that isn't healthy for a story, you gave exact brand names, in your case, you gave the exact name of the game your MC was playing. This can date your book quickly.
"He can't find us here, he won't find us here" I think only one sentence is okay because they both mean the same thing.
It was okay, the descriptions could be improved on. And also, you basically told us the story which made me feel nothing for them. But I like the idea of the story and this is my favorite category, so I would read on. If you need any help you can always come to me, although I am not a Pro but I can give reasonable advice :)
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