Author: Corey Fuchs CoreyFuchs
Category: Adventure
Before:
I like the cover, but it doesn't quite fit the genre.
Your synopsis 👌, nicely done. It heightened my curiosity.
After:
I love the way you started it. You got the action right in, that's kind of how I start my stories too.
The only thing I noticed is Point Of View problems on few paragraphs. You can't know what a character is intending when writing in third person limited. Also, you start too many sentences with 'she'.
I don't think I can be at peace without knowing what will happen next. I will definitely read on.
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