Flaws in Fanfics Percy Jackson Edition

Aqua Jackson 2

Hi It's me Aquamarine Stephanie KitKat Marine Mermaid Seashell Jackson but call me Aqua. So I was sitting on the beach with my BFF Charlotte Cupid Eros Emerald Selena Twix McLean when I saw my bf Nico Di Angelo walking with a girl.
"Hey Charlotte who's that girl with Nico"
"She's the praetor of Camp Jupi-somthing her names like Riley or Ria"
"What's she doing with Nico and is she wearing a bedsheet"
" no I think it's a togi"
"A togi that's like totes hilarious "
I looked back at the u g ly Spanish girl and Nico they were laughing
I walked over to them and pulled out my sword
"Hey you get away from my boyfriend"
And I scared her so much she ran away Nico and I made out
then everything went black

I woke up in the infirmary the whole camp was there my brother Percy said
"Oh my gosh Aqua we were soooooooooooo worried" and then he hugged me
Everyone Nodded and left me and Nico alone
We made out

So I saw Nico with another girl she was punk I asked Charlotte who she was
"She's a hunter of Apollo Thea or something " since Charlotte knew everyone
I walked up to her and scared her and she went running
Me and Nico made out

So then chiron call ed d us to the Big House
He t old us we had to go to school
So we all went to Goode all the boys just looked at me and Nico gave them death glares he's soooooooooooo sweet and all the girls hated me and I got perfect grades sick I'm blesses by all the gods
The end