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Unbecoming Humans (F/F)

Unbecoming Humans (F/F)

81.4K Reads 4.5K Votes 34 Part Story
Brianna Kienitz By KorraCraic Completed

*Voted Best Sci-fi in the 2016 LGBT+ Watty's hosted by @NewStoriesLGBT*

Aria and the other residents of the secluded compound had it all, a huge, beautiful place to live, three excellent meals a day, a top notch education, and a future as the rulers of humanity. To top it all off, they have the best genes humanity has to offer, but it all comes at a price. Aria and the eleven others like her are prisoners, involuntary participants in an experimental genetic project aimed at preserving humanity. They can never leave the compound on pain of death. All they can do is sit and wait for the coming apocalypse to pass, so that they can fulfill their purpose.

Aria has all but given up on caring about much of anything. Her parents have been consumed by their work as the leaders of the cult of scientists who run the project. They stopped thinking of her as anything besides a test subject years ago. Aria is alienated from  the other residents, who do not share her misgivings about the program. Over the years, Aria has learned the hard way that resistance is futile and painful, so why bother anymore? That is, until a tall, dark, and beautiful stranger is assigned to the room next to hers.

Highest rating: #11 in Science Fiction

KorraCraic KorraCraic Oct 12, 2016
I will probably take that story out when I edit. It's a bit out of place.
SoWhat_If SoWhat_If Nov 09, 2016
Loving your writing so far! First chapter and I'm already loving the main character. Pretty excited to see what this turns into. 🙌👏
smut_slut smut_slut Oct 19, 2016
Great chapter. I like the idea of a story within a story, that's a nice touch. I found that story pretty entertaining actually lol. In terms of the main story, you write very well. It's very descriptive and everything was grammatically correct to my knowledge. Good job :)
BookThief00 BookThief00 Oct 31, 2016
Wow! This is a perfect first chapter. It introduces the main character enough that the reader becomes interested, and the air of mystery surrounding the stranger is perfect. I also enjoyed the story of the old woman, it was very unique.
JasmineMichelle585 JasmineMichelle585 Aug 26, 2016
wow it is so long! you are really great at writing and i am sooo looking forward to reading the next chapter. keep up the good work!
TheWatermelonWarrior TheWatermelonWarrior Nov 04, 2016
I love the way you've presented the main character! You've taken the trope of a character resenting their beauty and changed it in such a way that it feels fresh, new and genuine. And I can't help but see the world from her point of view, and I like her already. Great job!