The Girl That Was Buried In Her Ball Gown

18 Part Story 4.8K Reads 170 Votes
Ian King By dotandtittle Updated 6 months ago
How could one evening at the junior high school ball turn into something completely unexpected.  When something goes terribly wrong, what will happen to a young girl who's world has been turned upside down?  Who can she turn to, who can she trust?  What is it with these others that are trying to impersonate her and leading her to some place she does not want to go.
The only thing I'd have to say that is negative about this is your paragraph and sentence structure. In my opinion, it's a little choppy and you could add a few more paragraphs; some of them are quite long. In the beginning of the chapter I noticed a few mistakes, like a word was either missing or it was the wrong word typed by accident. I like the idea, though.
The only thing I'd have to say that is negative about this is your paragraph and sentence structure. In my opinion, it's a little choppy and you could add a few more paragraphs; some of them are quite long. In the beginning of the chapter I noticed a few mistakes, like a word was either missing or it was the wrong word typed by accident. I like the idea, though.
The only thing I'd have to say that is negative about this is your paragraph and sentence structure. In my opinion, it's a little choppy and you could add a few more paragraphs; some of them are quite long. In the beginning of the chapter I noticed a few mistakes, like a word was either missing or it was the wrong word typed by accident. I like the idea, though.
The only thing I'd have to say that is negative about this is your paragraph and sentence structure. In my opinion, it's a little choppy and you could add a few more paragraphs; some of them are quite long. In the beginning of the chapter I noticed a few mistakes, like a word was either missing or it was the wrong word typed by accident. I like the idea, though.
The only thing I'd have to say that is negative about this is your paragraph and sentence structure. In my opinion, it's a little choppy and you could add a few more paragraphs; some of them are quite long. In the beginning of the chapter I noticed a few mistakes, like a word was either missing or it was the wrong word typed by accident. I like the idea, though.
The only thing I'd have to say that is negative about this is your paragraph and sentence structure. In my opinion, it's a little choppy and you could add a few more paragraphs; some of them are quite long. In the beginning of the chapter I noticed a few mistakes, like a word was either missing or it was the wrong word typed by accident. I like the idea, though.