[Paalala lang po. Hindi po ako perpekto. Binabase ko po ang pagcritic ng mga stories niyo sa nalalaman ko at gusto ko lang maging honest sa inyo. Now, if hindi po kayo kontento, wala na po akong magagawa doon.]
TITLE: Torn in Between
Written by: noonabii
➡️Your title already described what will be the flow of your story is. Parang sa'kin, pagkabasa ko pa lang, expected ko na ang mangyayari sa kwento.
COVER:
➡️Your cover is nice. It really reflects and describe what your title is. Suggest ko lang na if it's okay with you, you change the places of your penname and the series title of it para mas maemphasize na series talaga ito.
NARRATION:
➡️Your narration is good also. The way you narrate the story with the use of Filipino language is amazing. Para talagang forte mo ang gamitin ang language natin sa pagsusulat.
TECHNICALITIES:
➡️ So far, kaunti din ang napansin ko. Some of your paragraph are long. I suggest na kung pwede ay i-cut mo sila and add a line spacing para hindi siya nakakaumay tignan at hindi nakakaduling. Also, some of your words are mispelled. Yung iba naman ay kulang ng isang letter but it camstill be edited naman.
OVERVIEW:
➡️I like your story. The way you narrate it and the emotions of the characters. Alam mo yun, nararamdaman ko talaga yung sparks. Kahit na sa simpleng gestures lang nila. Especially doon sa tinginan moment~
Quote from Shee: “Decisions are part of our life.So whether you like or not, in times of challenges and struggles, you have to choose wise.”
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Critique Station 2020
Non-FictionDo you need someone to read your story and someone who can give an honest opinions about your work? Advices for improvements? You're in the right station! ACTIVE (every weekends): [✔] March 2020 [] April 2020 [] May 2020
