[Paalala lang po. Hindi po ako perpekto. Binabase ko po ang pagcritic ng mga stories niyo sa nalalaman ko at gusto ko lang maging honest sa inyo. Now, if hindi po kayo kontento, wala na po akong magagawa doon.]
TITLE: Off Limits
Written by: Huwada
➡️Sa title mo pa lang, marami ng possible plot ang pumasok sa isip ko. Nakakalito and nakakacurious at the same time ang maaaring maging twist ng story which is good. Hindi siya yung paspoil na uri ng title.
COVER:
➡️Ang astig ng cover mo. Kasing astig nito ang bida sa story mo. Thumbs up ako diyan.
NARRATION:
➡️Your narration is good. As in maganda ang pagkakasulat mo nito. The way you describe the scenes and the mood ay talagang masusundan ng mga mambabasa ang mga pangyayarivat maiimagine talaga ng malinaw.
TECHNICALITIES:
➡️ So far, I only notice small technicalities such as some wrong spelling and the use of the punctuations. May times din bigla-bigla ka na lang naglalagay ng mga English word/s sa mga paragraph na in Filipino.
OVERVIEW:
➡️Your story is good and the way you started it is nice. Talagang hindi mo maeexpect ang twist nito sa huli. Especially when I read the first three chapters of it. But then, as I got to the last page, doon lang talaga naging malinaw ang lahat and it is indeed OFF LIMITS. Ansakit umasa! Hahaha.
Quote from Shee: "Love sometimes come in the most unexpected time."
BINABASA MO ANG
Critique Station 2020
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