Mark Of The Divine

Chapter X. The Boy

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"Who so neglects learning in his youth loses the past and is dead to the future."

-Euripedes

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Chapter X. The Boy

"Hello?"

"She's gone Langdon, leave her."

"Father look she'd still breathing"

"How is that possible?"The man said

"Wake up"The boy said

"Here let me pick her up"The man said

'No father I want to"the boy said. Calypso drifting in and out of consciousness felt like years, every time she awoke her eyes were faced to her fathers lone head, she dreaded waking up. Before she was swallowed by darkness, a hand pressed onto her face pushing her curly hair from her face

"She's beautiful Father"

"She's the Laskaris kid, she's been gone for what five months"The man said, Calypso held on, she was trying to at least.

"She couldn't have survived out here for long"The boy said

"They found her father's body a month ago, where ever she's been, it was a miracle" And as if a breath from heavens shot down and into Calypso's lungs she awoke with a scream

End Of Chapter X.The Boy

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Critique Questions/ Survey

Did the story hold your interest from the very beginning? If not, why not?

Did the setting interest you, and did the descriptions seem vivid and real to you?

Were there any parts that confused you? Or even frustrated or annoyed you? Which parts, and why?

Were the characters believable? Are there any characters you think could be made more interesting or more likeable?

Did the dialogue keep your interest and sound natural to you? If not, whose dialogue did you think sounded artificial or not like that person would speak?

Did you feel there was too much description or exposition? Not enough? Maybe too much dialogue in parts?

Which characters did you really connect to?

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