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By aratsgroup

Author: -relatable-taco

Reviewer: sasminagurung

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Cover:

The cover is really nice and well done however it would have been better if the writer could use a cover that related to the storyline.Something that actually shows the mcflurry incident or the basketball thing.

Rate: 4.5/5

Description area:

One of the best work I have come across,beautifully describes the story.

Rate: 5/5

Storyline :

The story may sound a bit cliche but the author has actually done miracle with writing and the plot of story by putting her own essence.It was like remembering some old movies which I absolutely liked about the writer.This book is highly recomended for teenagers .

Personal Pov :

The story actually was really good because I could actually portray my self as Kendall and it brings up so many memories or let's say reminds about the old high school movies.

The writer's each sentence was really beautiful and all the moments were beautifully explained however this book made me work hard more than ever at the same time.

Each chapter holds a lot of spelling mistake which I can understand being a writer.

Spelling corrections

Chapter 1

- Complusary = Compulsory

- Closet = Closest

-Manhatten =Manhattan
(Repeated in other chapters too)

- Whreck = Wreck

- Chesire = Cheshire

-Encouregement = Encouragement

Chapter 2

- Guarduation = Graduation

Chapter 3

- Guarente = Guarantee

- Bitting = Biting

- Anxioety = Anxiety

Chapter 4

Discribe = Describe

Supose = Suppose

Absoulety = Absouletly

Balence = Balance

Literary = literally

Chapter 5

Espcially = Especially

Permant = Permanent

Ussually = Usually
*Repeated in other chapter too

Entertwined = Intertwined

Phycologist = Psychologist

Chapter 6

Remember

Chapter 7

Marriage

2. Punctuation mistake

For eg
Mistake

"I am stupid". he said

Correct way

"I am stupid," he said.

3.Use of incomplete sentence

"Yeah."

4. Sentence mistakes/use of words that doesn't exist

Chapter 1

I smiled nodding in understandment

There's no word called as understandment

After every fullstop please write the begging letter in capital.

Chapter 2

Had her phone on her at all of the ...

On should be replaced by with.

2. Kicked off of the team
Add of

3. Than shrugged and smiled

Then should be used here not than.

4. It was weird he acted as if we barely even knew eachother.

You should remove if because it is incorrect.

Chapter 3

Was were David had been

It should be where not were.

P.s. there might be more mistake that I might have left out so please check it other than that your story and writing is awesome.

Goodluck

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