As writers it can be very hard to know exactly what our readers want/ expect from a book, not only is it hard to please our readers but it is also hard to accept all our hard work and to find greatness within it. Sometimes it is hard to find the mot...
To The Moon Goddess by Fernweh_Faraway (Note from owner of the book. This review was completed by me :) As an FYI/ apologies for it taking so long. I hadn't realised until now that I accidentally missed you from the July list 🥺which was ages ago😩 and so you been waiting soo long compared to everyone else. So very sorry bout that... Hope you can forgive me and hope you like the review ☺️)
Overal Review: From what I can tell this book is a fantasy/Romance. It is a boyxboy wolf story. The story is based upon a boy who just wants to be loved and accepted and to have his wildist dream to come true but what if that isn't possible? Or so it would seem. It's a book that has twist/turns and one in which happens early on in the book so I won't give it away. But I do reccomended going to read this book 🥰😍
Positives/ What I Enjoyed: - Your inner dialogue of the characters are well written and help the readers understand the characters more and what they are feeling, so we'll done for this! I even laughed at one of the inner thoughts (in chapter 1 I think) about the pancakes and ow much he had ordered for himself haha.
- You can easily tell who is narrating the story (The povs.) this is good as we don't get confused whilst reading.
- Your paragraphs were spaced out rather well and made it more easy to read as well as creating more emotional moments at given times.
- OK so the second chapter. Loved💕. It was so good! It was such an emotional roller-coaster and I really didn't expect that to happen. (Spoilers! When he didn't get turned - like ooof.)
Also on that note of the second chapter I really like this part. I literally was like 'oof, ouch. Harsh' after reading it being the last line of this paragraph. (Again spoilers in pic below!!)
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'... For he was not one of us.'
Like I just can't explain how creative/emotional that was as a reader. So well done with describing/ doing this sad scene! 🥳 You didn't have to worry bout it. It was good.
Constructive Critism OK so honestly I don't have much criticism to be honest but here are a few tips I suppose 😅 :/
- Firstly there is at least 1 I that is lowercase in the first 4 chapters. I don't remember which. I think it was the 2nd or 3rd to shorten it. So I suggest going back through book and just checking a few things like that etc.( Not too big of a deal but just to make it the best it can be.)
- Secondly, you did this rather well to be honest. But showing not telling. At most times you did show but there were still some points where you did just tell. For example in chapter 2 you said something about being happy near the beginning. Instead of just telling us your happy describe/show it. A simple way to do this would to say 'warm glow in my heart' or 'a smile crept onto my lips' or even 'I'm bursting with joy'... Though I feel that the last example given still in some ways telling as it tells being joyful but you could get away with it 😬. Regardless there are many ways (like the first 2 examples I give) to show happiness. and you can delve into it more when your feeling really happy (like it being a happy scene rather than it being a statement) for example,
When I saw his eyes staring back as me the guilt within me subsided and my eyes softened, as I could feel a warmth rising to my cheeks. I could just tell that I had the fattest grin from cheek to cheek, my heart leaping with lust as my feet carried me all the way to him and into his strong arms. Etc etc.
You get the point of course this was just a random example and not nessicarly direct to your book but this is what I mean by delving into showing not telling in perhaps a scene rather than a statement.
If I were to translate that to telling it would look something like this.
When I saw his eyes staring back at me the sad within me subsided. I felt happy knowing he is mine. Running into his strong arms.
See the difference?
Like I say you were pretty good at this but I think you could delvelop it even more in places and as you can tell the 1st(showing) really reads better than the 2nd (telling) ☺️
- Oh as another tip, I would try changing your description of the book to not include (spoiler) the fact he doesn't shift into a woldlf because I went into reading the book blind and found it to be a really great twist! However people who read description may be less shocked and it may change how people see the book... Though this is just opinion. When writing descriptions for your book try give them an overview without giving too much away. 🤔
Anyhow hope this helps you, sorry it isn't much advice but I hope it helps anyhow 🙁😅
Overal Thoughts: OK, so as my overall thoughts I want to say I really did enjoy the first 4 chapters I read and think your writing style/ideas are great! I'll probably carry on reading it too slowly when I have time, because honestly I really enjoyed the plot. I think that the writing isn't too bad ethier as you can see above. So well done and please keep writing!! Your really good at it.
Personal Rate: 8/10 Im going to give 8 out of 10 because if the minor issues in the book and because it was a good read and I only read 4 chapters 👁️👄👁️
Any questions about the review, please ask me. I'll be happy to answer :)
