Finding August [MXM]✓

Finding August [MXM]✓

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ѕaιnт calιendo By saintc Completed

August walked out of Vincent's life the same way he walked in- unexpectedly.

Vincent had a decent quiet life working as a tattoo artist in the city of Detroit until the runway aspiring artist August knocks at his front door asking for a home. August promises it will only be for a year and Vincent agrees, but Vincent never knew that August keeping to that promise was going to be so painful.
  
Now Vincent sees August in the news just months after his disappearance. August is making it big and will be holding his first exhibition in New York. The thing is, Vincent can't just seem to stop himself from chasing after him.
  
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veronica-h veronica-h Jul 16
The "concerning August" can be removed since we understand that you're talking about him.
"of" should either be "He still couldn't shake him off his mind" or "He still couldn't shake him out of his mind"
veronica-h veronica-h Jul 16
Maybe you could add something like: "It didn't matter to Vincent" to show what the character thought of August's race.
I think it should be 'He still couldn't shake him off of his mind'
veronica-h veronica-h Jul 16
I think the sentence "He left like a ghost, . . ." would provide more impact if you made it into two separate sentences. Like: "He left like a ghost, a faint memory. And yet, he was still very vivid in Vincent's mind." And then start a new paragraph from "Vincent should have expected it."
YeoliePanda YeoliePanda May 30
 #Serenity#
                              This is a great chapter and I like how the background information provided gives sneek peeks of the past sufficient to help the reader understand what happened.
                              And how admire how you've created a way for us to connect with Vincent by showing us he has deep feelings for August.