Terres (Wattpad featured story)

Terres (Wattpad featured story)

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Violet Sun By VioletSun5 Completed

Wren is afraid of marked ones. Their steely demeanors and the wings on their backs send a cold shiver down her spine. She knows they don't have it easy. The very lucky ones end up as guardians of the caravan. The unlucky ones end up reaver food.
      
    Just when she's gotten used to their presence, the childhood friend that abandoned her suddenly reappears, sporting wings on his back and harboring dark secrets. Wren can't just forgive him for the awful things he did to her, and she tries to distance herself, but she is forced back into his life when she runs to the other side of the caravan to escape the arranged marriage her family has plotted for months.
      
    But the people on the other side are destitute, hungry, and angry. They're resentful of the guardsmen who do nothing to protect them, and of the merchants who pay them to turn their heads. And some of them are angry with her. She finds herself trapped in a conflict she did not ask to be involved with, for a goal that was never hers. 
      
    An unpleasant surprise forces her back home just in time for an uprising to erupt, then spill into her backyard. With her best friend nowhere to be found and her parents gone as well, her childhood adversary may be the only one who is able to help her.
    
    NOTE: This book is currently being edited and is undergoing rolling updates. The story will remain the same as before, with some of the mistakes removed :)
      
      Cover by @seventhstar :)

I love how it merges the regular life so effortlessly with your descriptions.
rellish rellish Jul 20
Oddly worded. This really doesn't give us a sense of where the gashes are or how big they are. 
                              - how about- ....two huge gashes sliced through the upper part of his back where the huge wings emerged, ending only when they reached his shoulders.... 
                              
                              Or something like that.
rellish rellish Jul 20
How about starting with an action?  
                              
                              ... she breathed a sigh of relief as she pushed aside the flap to her family's tent.....
rellish rellish Jul 20
Do the guards also have wings?  If not, suggest using a different word her. Flanking, maybe
rellish rellish Jul 20
Here is a good place to talk about whst happened 4 years ago and why her life changed so drastically. Give us a little history and context
Wordtoyamother Wordtoyamother 3 hours ago
Oof. Vibe. Sometimes the fires of hell are preferable to talks with mom.