Red Mist (Naruto FanFic)

Red Mist (Naruto FanFic)

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[Book One]

"I'm proud of who I am. A thief, a lone traveler who never stops running. Just watch me, I will fight and survive, for me and by myself."

Akai is not a shinobi. She's just a travelling mercenary with no destination.

Okay... 'mercenary' is just the kind way to call her...

She's also a thief. Merely just for the thrill. She did everything she wants, no rules can stop her.

Until she stumbled upon Konoha. A warm, peaceful place, unlike her 'home'. The people's kindness is something new for her.

Will she stay? Or will she continue her old life, messing with other people and running away?

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DISCLAIMER: We do not own Naruto. Naruto belongs to Masashi Kishimoto


Nyxen72 Nyxen72 Aug 11
His eye* (it's KakaBaka, right?) widened as the crowd starts yelling and lunges* at him
Nyxen72 Nyxen72 Aug 11
You shinobi*- no s this is japanese -are all the same. Hurting the innocent ones, and then you (will sounds awkward) say that it's not like you want to do it, tashikani.
Nyxen72 Nyxen72 Aug 11
"If you will not tell us your* name, will you tell us where you are from?" The Third (uppercase!) asked.
Nyxen72 Nyxen72 Aug 11
The girl once again rolled her eyes as she stared* at the* Hokage.
Nyxen72 Nyxen72 Aug 11
- you drink sake while you are* underage. - she still is, right?
Nyxen72 Nyxen72 Aug 11
Akai laughed, quickening* her pace. The house owner had* found her while* she was rummaging through the wardrobe ~for a new shirt to wear~, and now he was chasing* her.
                              ...* = that one word wrong
                              ~.. ...~ = I rephrased the part or the whole sentence so that it flows better