Your Sweet Talk Always Was A Bit Much

Your Sweet Talk Always Was A Bit Much

10 Part Story 6.3K Reads 212 Votes
Aemi By AemiJules Updated Feb 03, 2012

Madeleine has been in love with Noah since she was fifteen. Living with her brother's best friend, she's finally gotten away from Noah's drama. Now that one exhausting relationship was over it wouldn't hurt to let someone else in. But why risk it?

shellbell232 shellbell232 Dec 15, 2011 04:47AM
I'm interested ...agree comments looking 4 little more details and hook regarding characters....however like story start and Lex guy intrest in her.  Add more inner thoughts fears and will make story stronger .  I shall read on.  Keep going
skiesjpg skiesjpg Nov 03, 2011 09:33AM
Everything pieced together was alright, no grammar mistakes or anything, and I find that the plot and the description was quite good, so keep it up!
Okaaay. I think you should work on your intro a little bit. It's fine, don't worry about it, but I wish it would pull me into the story a little more, you know? That's my only suggestion!
Poindexter Poindexter Oct 22, 2011 02:53AM
Sorry this took me so long.
                              I like your characters, as well as your plot and writing style. Everthing flows nicely together. Though, like someone said before, I do wish there were more details.
AemiJules AemiJules Oct 22, 2011 02:29AM
@Zoomiez Thanks! I've consolidated the first and second chapters so the second chapter is just a repeat, because I have yet to delete it... so if you want to continue reading skip to chapter 3!
Perfextionist Perfextionist Oct 22, 2011 01:45AM
carefree and totally light, GREAT JOB! :) This was a very good way to start :)