Invulnerable

Invulnerable

7.2K Reads 97 Votes 10 Part Story
CryingStatues By CryingStatues Completed

Nathalie Polanski. You'd think shes normal right? Wrong. With her father  trying to kill her, high school and a new addition to her already limited family, shes anything but normal.

tianajade tianajade Jul 24, 2011
It started off good, but then it lacked a whole lot of description and emotion. I couldn't feel any of the emotions that should have been described in a scene like this. I think it needs some work, but it just may have some potential. Keep on writing (:
CryingStatues CryingStatues Apr 08, 2010
@Clarity Oddly enough, thats one of my favorite comments. :P 
Clarity Clarity Apr 08, 2010
Need to no more! Ahh, your story is awesome, this is not to sound mean, but I got the creeps because he was her dad, I um puked. Otherwise it rocked Escape Nathalie escape ^-^
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blazing_dreams4 blazing_dreams4 Apr 06, 2010
wow. sounds great so far. only one comment, really, is that you might wanna go back and check your punctuation and stuff. other than that, its really good :) keep up the good work
                              
                              oh, and i LOVE the picture. its great
Dani_girl Dani_girl Apr 04, 2010
i love it hope you upload soon and i hope shes not pregnat or however you spell that