Nathalie Polanski. You'd think shes normal right? Wrong. With her father trying to kill her, high school and a new addition to her already limited family, shes anything but normal.
It started off good, but then it lacked a whole lot of description and emotion. I couldn't feel any of the emotions that should have been described in a scene like this. I think it needs some work, but it just may have some potential. Keep on writing (:
@Clarity Oddly enough, thats one of my favorite comments. :P
Need to no more! Ahh, your story is awesome, this is not to sound mean, but I got the creeps because he was her dad, I um puked. Otherwise it rocked Escape Nathalie escape ^-^
wow. sounds great so far. only one comment, really, is that you might wanna go back and check your punctuation and stuff. other than that, its really good :) keep up the good work
oh, and i LOVE the picture. its great
i love it hope you upload soon and i hope shes not pregnat or however you spell that