So right now, I'm joining a book club. In this club, I get to be partnered with a lot of people to read with each other, and also to fix the mistakes that we've made. I'm glad I can find the book club, because so many people are pointing out the things I could fix, such as excessive use of adverbs, incorrect punctuation, repeated names and the word 'said, exclaimed, etc', and some chapters that are too lengthy.
I've made quite a big revision based on the inputs I've received (I'm not going to say that it's perfect already). However, as I'm still in the book club and will not be on Hiatus or Break mode for maybe two or three months (or maybe even more than that), I cannot totally revise it. Therefore I'm going to upload the revision only for the parts that my reading partner have passed through.
Hopefully it will not disturb the entire book club reading process :D