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Reviewed by: Anusara12
Book Title: The Venetian Mysteries
Author: LaviniaFonzi
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Cover: 9/10
The cover of your book is beautiful and simple. I liked it. The tomb and then the boats match up with the story settings. Though I liked it, my only thought was that the font could have been better.
Title: 7/10
The title of your book was good, I liked it, It gave off a mysterious vibe which will pique the interest of the readers. But then, I don't get its relation with the story plot. From the initial chapters, I think the mystery is the murder plan. Maybe I will understand the relation between them as the story unfolds.
Blurb/Description: 6/10
The blurb of your book was good but I feel like it could've been better. It needs a bit of polishing to do before it becomes perfect.
Firstly, tenses, there were a lot of shifts from present to past tense. Try maintaining a tense. Preferably past because your story setting is in the past.
Secondly, try not to repeat the details, you have already mentioned in the year at the beginning of the blurb so you don't have to mention them again.
Thirdly, try using words that build up the mystery to your story and pique the interest of the readers.
Creativity and originality: 8/10
I liked how you started the first chapter. But I felt you could've explained the theft part in more detailed because that is where the main story begins.
Plot and Flow: 17/20
The plot of your book was new, not all authors choose to write stories with settings in the past. It takes some courage to do that, also I think you have done a lot of research on the settings. It feels natural and not forced, which is a good thing.
The only thing I felt was you could've added more plot twist. It will make your story more unique and interesting for the readers.
The flow of your book was great. I enjoyed it. Some authors tend to shift from slow to fast-paced often, I didn't find that in your book which is a good thing and you did a great job in that.
Character Development: 7/10
Your main focus was on the plot that I felt like you didn't concentrate much on the characters. Though your description was good and detailed, I still felt like you could have added some unique character for us to remember them. But since the story is just going to start, I hope I will see more of the characters.
Writing style, Grammar, spellings, etc.: 6/10
Your writing style is good and descriptive. The way you explained every movement of the characters were amazing. Once again try adding unique characteristic, so that readers will connect with your characters.
There weren't any spelling mistakes, I was able to find some grammatical mistakes. I know this a translated novel. But having an editor for yourself will help your work improve. The grammar rules differ in each language. I don't want you to lose readers just because of the small mistakes that you made unknowingly.
Genre relevance: 10/10
This is very well related to historical fiction and mystery. The settings explain that it is a historical fiction novel and your way of writing and description that builds tension clearly shows that it is a mystery novel.
Reader enjoyment and Communication with the readers: 8/10
I loved your book. It's amazing. It just needs some polishing to make it better. I'm not a fan of historical fiction but the first line of your book made me say Wow.
Overall: 78/100
Your book is amazing. The way you write, the plot and the first impression parts are really good. Just make sure to check for grammatical mistakes. They are something you have to look out for. I understand that it is a translated book, so make sure you look out for mistakes before publishing the chapter. Other than that your book is great. Keep writing amazing books. All the best!
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