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COVER : 8/10
The cover is cute! I love how it's simple, but it was able to represent the fantasy theme in it, which is great! However, the title on the cover was small, so I wasn’t able to see it. Along with the font's dark color choice that contracts with the already dark cover background.
TITLE : 9/10
Your title choice is great! It was interesting, and it made me want to read your story. However, the title alone is quite common in the wattpad community, so I had to deduct a point for the lack of uniqueness in it. Nonetheless, I think that your title fits very well with your story.
STORY DESCRIPTION : 8/10
Your story's description was beautiful! It sounds mysterious, which makes readers want to read your story. However, there are some grammar mistakes located in your blurb such as, Issue 01 = In the sentence 'May, Athena, Paige, and Reagan was the bestest of friends' you should have changed the was into were and the bestest into only best. Issue 02 = Near the ending of your story description, you used 'a' when it should be 'an', because the word after that is enchanted. Issue 03 = In the last sentence,'Join them on their adventures beyond magic.' You should have used the word in rather than the word on.
PAGE LAYOUT : 8/10
Each of the chapters has a fair length. It's not too short nor too long, so good job! You also did a great job of managing the spacing between each paragraph. However, because of the grammar mistakes in your sentences, I feel like you were not able to execute this story to its fullest potential. I think if you can clean up these little problems, your story will look neater.
CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT: 5/10
I haven't seen any character development in any of your characters, but that's okay since your story is still in its early stages, I presume. As for the personalities of your characters, I think that they're too plain. There hasn't been anything that catches my eye, so you might want to spice things up.
GRAMMAR/VOCABULARY/SPELLINGS: 6/10
Your writing style is fairly simple, there aren't that many unique words, but that's okay! As long as you don't use the same words more than necessary. Your grammar is also quite good, but there are still grammar mistakes in your story. The mistakes that you frequently repeat are the misused past, present, and future tenses. You also seem to frequently forget to put some supporting words such as 'the', 'with', and that can confuse the readers. As for your spellings, it seems as though you frequently use lower case letters when it's supposed to be an Upper case. You could also simplify some words like 'I am' into 'I'm'.
COMMUNICATION WITH READERS : 2.5/5
I think you did a fairly good job of communicating with your readers at the beginning of the story. But as it goes, you seem to not communicate with them any longer. You also seem to only reply to specific readers. I don't know if this is just a coincidence or something else.
GENERAL SATISFACTION: 10/15
The story isn't that unique. It heavily reminds me of the story 'Alice in wonderland' and there are also some books that I have read with the same concept of yours, so that's a shame. For me, your writing seems to lack passion and emotion, so you might want to fix that. Because the more emotions expressed from your writing, the more interest is grown in the readers to continue reading. The major thing that threw me off is just your grammar and spellings, so I recommend for you to try and re-edit your book as a whole.
TOTAL:56.5/80
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