Naruto Fanfic Reviews

Destined To Be Together

Before I begin the interview, I want everyone to know I'm not a bully and that any negative critics I say are not to offend or hurt the author. We are only trying to help. I hope you enjoy and learn from this review and please for RAMEN' sake, remember you asked us to do this.

First Impressions:

I do not know about other people, but before I read the book, I often judge it by the cover, title, and description. I know if it looks and sounds good, I usually read it right away. Though I think this might be a given for any avid reader. Your cover is basically the essence of what your story will be about in a way. The better the cover, the better the story, because it means you are working earnestly to be so. The cover of your story is fine, if a tad uncolorful and dry. (Again, this is only my opinion!) 

Another way to catch a potential reader's attention is to have a catchy title. A title is precisely like a picture, meaning it can capture a thousand words about the story without giving anything away about the plot. Your title is cliche, but still decent to use. 

Writing a description of the story can be challenging, and I understand it as a fellow writer myself. You don't want your description to be too lengthy or even too limited. You also don't want to give the reader too much of your story. That being said, I think your description is lengthy and gives a bit of the plot away.

Your Story's Structure

So far, what I have observed is your stories structure is decent, but could use a little work, as I found it to be a tad bit rushed and scenes changing rapidly. Your chapters are okay, but they could be a little longer.  Your grammar is fine with only a few minor errors I could observe. The scenes are written well, but could use a bit more description and emotion.

Final Verdict on your story

I can imagine this gaining some popularity within time, as NaruHina is considered a popular ship.

I know I probably came off relatively rude or harsh, but this is a review and the author consented to it. Also, please remember this is merely my opinion, and other readers or writers may not agree with me on it. A review is nothing but free advice sometimes taken, and other times not okay. I'm hardly the perfect writer, and I can guarantee you I'm learning something new about writing daily.

Cheer's mate!

-Crowillow