Lindsey POV
"Bæbie! Hey wanna walk with moi today," I ask
"Sure I guess. I have to go check on my messed up parents furst tho." He looks at me with those green dreamy tortued orbs. I sigh at his hot,troubled self.
So here we are, after shcool we walked, all of a suden it's like raining. And it's sudenly frezing cold! Ugh! I feel my tight cloths stick to me. My bf grumbles, but smoothly takes of his badass lether jacket & drapes it arond my sholders. It smells like his pine-cinnamon essence. I love it. I snuggle my face in his coat.
When we reech the field. After walking in the rain. It's suddenly sunset. I sit down on the bench and en joy the exploshun of colours around me in the crisp, southern Cali are of summer.
I leen my head against my bf's arm. His arm is muscular, warm, and dry.
Soon we reach my house and I stand on my tippy toes and peck my bf of the cheek. Like a chicken. His fave food is chicken. But anyways, I go to give him back his jacket.
"No keep it, it gives me an excuse to c u again" he saids.
Ahh. He's so poetic. I go inside to much on some high-fat cookies yum!
Point out the cliches/stupid parts/plot holes!
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Raining Sunset
ChickLitLindsey, a perfect looking girl thinks she's ugly and fat. Her boyfriend agrees. He gives her his jacket. In the rain. At sunset. This is basically a story on what not to write an actual book about-CLICHE EVERYTHING.
