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❄ THE LOST MEDALLION︱CRAZY ❄

Onto the second part of the title: The Lost Medallion. Some advice: you should introduce the idea of the medallion early on without spilling all of its secrets. In the first Percy Jackson, the concept of some crime being committed, apparently by Percy, is introduced in chapter 1, but vaguely. In chapter five, we learn something is stolen. By chapter 9, we learn that it's Zeus's master bolt. If this lost medallion is important, we should learn the concept of it early, and slowly introduce more and more details.

Cover: 10/10

I love your cover. The color scheme is well chosen and kept to. All of the text is readable. It's not too chaotic (you only have the medallion and the wolf silhouettes). Finally, the golden streak in the horizon well serves the purpose of drawing the eye to the main feature of your cover: the medallion. Overall, your cover artist did an impressive job and you did well to choose that cover.

Blurb: 7/10

One problem with your blurb is the fact that none of this has happened yet. If the events of your blurb happen too late, readers will be wondering when the adventure happens, so be careful with that. Currently, it stretches a little long, but it's not a major problem.

Another problem is that readers don't learn anything about the main character or Anastacia in this blurb. It leads to questions like, 'Who is Anastacia, and why do Eclipse and Eliana care?' and 'Who are Eclipse and Eliana anyway?' These questions aren't the type to get you, readers. It's important to explain who the characters are so that they have reason to be invested.

Besides, the quote at the end of your blurb seems a little out of place. It doesn't connect to the rest of your blurb very well.

The last problem is an aesthetic thing. Your blurb starts with: 'One letter, a million changes.' (Amazing tagline, by the way.) It's in a paragraph, however, which means it doesn't get the attention it deserves.

One last thing. This problem carries over from your title. There's no explanation about whether it's a series or not.

Tips:

Make sure that while you're introducing the world of your story, as in all of the chapters where your characters are meeting other elements and where your characters are participating in normal golden circle activity, that you include enough hints to the adventure waiting for them. Things like cryptic conversation or eavesdropping could be used to show readers that you haven't forgotten the blurb and what your plot is.

As for the trouble with the main characters, maybe you can start with a brief statement about who they are and what Anastacia means to them, before moving on to how Anastacia was taken and there's a spy in the camp.

When it comes to the quote, I would suggest making the quote related to the description of the blurb, for context reasons. Maybe include the whole conversation? Or just pick a quote that has something to do with whether or not they'll go on the mission.

For the aesthetic of your blurb, I would suggest that you put the tagline on a paragraph of its own so that it can stand out.

As for whether or not this is a series, all you need to do to make that clear is write, at the end of the blurb, 'Book One of the Elements Trilogy' or something like that.

Plot/Flow: 14/20

Most of my problems in this aspect have to do with your flow. It's too fast in some places and too slow in others.