The Bane of Asgard

The Bane of Asgard

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Jade Jackson By JadeJackson221B Updated Jun 15, 2015

I've seen a lot of Percy Jackson and Marvel's the Avengers crossovers, and while they don't always make the most sense they are very fun to read and even more fun to write. This particular edition takes place after the war against Gaea, which unfortunately took a dark turn and left only Percy, Nico di Angelo, and Thalia Grace out of our more popular characters. The three of them have been reported by mortals all over the place, unwary of their ability to see through the mist. When S.H.I.E.L.D goes to investigate they are surprised to find an immortal huntress, a quiet pale boy in all black, and Percy Jackson, once the powerful and famous but now a broken teenager.
I don't own Marvel's the Avengers or Percy Jackson.
Unfortunately.

JadeJackson221B JadeJackson221B Apr 22, 2015
@Madi_96 good point. I'm going to edit all this when I'm done because im writing on the spot, so I'm taking  screenshots of all you guys' advice, which I am very thankful for.
- - Apr 22, 2015
It would be better if you wrote:
                              "With the other, Percy threw Riptide around BUT the monsters just laughed." 
                              Use BUT instead of AND.
JadeJackson221B JadeJackson221B Apr 04, 2015
@LunaAtkinson how else do I say that, cos the first time he was just getting her off the ground and then he began carrying her
JadeJackson221B JadeJackson221B Apr 04, 2015
@LunaAtkinson I'm watching markiplier so I'll fix it tomorrow because I need to read for school
Luna_Atkinson Luna_Atkinson Apr 04, 2015
you said he picked her up, but in the next paragraph you said he picked her up like a child.
Luna_Atkinson Luna_Atkinson Apr 04, 2015
instead of "he was in tartarus again and he was screaming" you should have, "he was in tartarus again, screaming