A sad story. If only it were true.
Yeah, over all I liked it also. Plot matters to me, and you stayed on plot.
pst, please check out my story titled, "I Love You Baby"
Wow nice work! Some parts you miss some words though, like "I trip on and skin up my arm." and "my life seemed to have out from under my feet" but still a great peice! Very creative! (oh and staring not starring lol, just reread it!)