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Torn Apart (Payzer fanfic)

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By Shy_Girl14

Dedicated @JessandRich for writing the book.

Plot and Idea: enjoyable

Summary: After they broke up, Danielle was Torn. And Liam was apart from her. Now even more apart ever since he started dating Sophia. Danielle moved on, and so did Liam. Then, they were reunited. Well that's all I got. I don't want to spoil it so just read the book! GOSH! People these days.

Copyright © JessandRich

My Review: Right at the beginning it was confusing, The sudden punctuation changes are not very good. The story is moving at a fast pace slow it down, right after Liam leaves Perrie can't suddenlt appear. And when the characters speak you don't have to say (ex. Liam said or I said or Said Perrie). Just because soemthing the character says is capitalized doesn't mean that the way they are saying it must be as well (ex. I SAID). And if they say it does not mean they're yelling. This book has many issues especially the pace at the beginning. The spacing is ok though and so is the grammer so far from what I can see. The punctuation needs work.

Rating: 5

Overall: I think this story needs work

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