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Fall For You

10 1 0
By Shy_Girl14

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Plot and Idea:


Genre: Romance


Summary:

Sara was just a normal girl, blonde hair, blue eyes and big nerdy glasses. A true nerd. She was probably the prettiest girl in school. Aidan was the bad boy, who was like a yo-yo in and out of custody, buying and trading illegal products in an attempt to impress his jailed father, who crowned him an insult to his name.

What happens if they somehow fall for each other and they have to work together to make themselves work or they'll be each other's downfall.


My Review: This story seems to be moving a bit too fast and your description isn't that good. The punctuation is alright a majority of the time, but does need some work. The dialogue isn't very good either and your development needs work.


The grammar is off and confusing, but your spacing isn't that bad from what I can see. Your paragraphs are confusing and the length of your chapters feel too short and cut off. You do have proper capitalization, like many other writers, but you need help with sentence structure and your cover as well.


Rating: 6.7


Overall: Needs work




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