Book Reviews

4. Being Butch Green

Review done by Khala and Jasmine

Title: Being Butch Green

Author: Hollie_Wilson

Review done by Jasmine:

🔴 Writing Style
⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ = 1.00

🔴 Grammar and Punctuation
⭐⭐⭐⭐ = 0.80

🔴 Dialogue
⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ = 1.00

🔴 Cover
⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ = 1.00

🔴 Summary
⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ = 1.00

Jasmine's total = 4.8

Jasmine's overall review

Writing Style: I had to say, it began on a great one-liner. And the next chapter opened up with a great passage as well, the writer had a way with words, painting me a portrait as I read, telling how the scene should look, making sure I didn't erase the scene and keeping on pace with tell me how the world was being built right along with the MC and the other characters around him. Beautiful, the errors found were minimal at best and didn't take too much out of the reading flow, nothing some quick editing couldn't solve. I had to say, I haven't laughed out loud at 4am in a while, like I did reading this book. Butch was also very entertaining to see. It was like watching a movie with the concept of everything that can go wrong, will, and it did. Excellent job, the readers seemed to catch onto to the story well and showed their enjoyment, relations and laughter with you.

Grammar and Punctuation: every writer has this problem and I don't blame you for having either. Please don't over-abuse the commas. I love a good comma as much as the next writer, but pacing oneself with the comma usage is key to not having run on sentences, or paragraphs that seem to drain a little out of the reader. It was subtle enough that those who don't read to analyze wouldn't be too pressed about it, but visible enough to be caught by the eye of a fellow writer with an analytical mind. I'd have to say, that was the main issue found, but this too can be sanded down and improved without much head scratching. Punctuation was much better and well executed, you know when and where to use it and that made the story go on without any confusion.

Dialogue: the writer made the dialogue work well even as the MC was on his lonesome for the entirety of the first chapter. The dialogue grows more humorous and natural when another person is involved soon after. I like how you made the smallest amount of words have the biggest of impact in the dialogue written, truly great to see that masterful skill.

Cover: the cover is beautiful and I think it fits well with the story and the fact that the MC is on the run. The Title is clean clear and big enough to be read, the subtitle is also nicely scaled to fit but not overpower the image.

Summary: The summary is well written, it gives enough knowledge to the reader without selling out too much of the story. The summary holds an air of mystery and questions that seem to tease the reader into finding out more. It certainly has a great way of roping in the reader and making them want to find out just what is going on with Butch and this dangerous file... And how the hell he broke out and how the hell he got a hold of that file. Lol.

Overall, the writing is great, the story is strong, book is well-written and the characters are well fleshed out, I think that this story is well on it's way to becoming greater than it is. I'm routing for your future endeavors as a writer.

Review Done By Khala

🔴Writing Style:

⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️= 0.80

🔴Grammar and Punctuation:

⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️= 0.80

🔴Dialogue:

⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️= 0.80

🔴Cover:

⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️= 0.80

🔴Summary:

⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️= 1.00

Khala's Total = 4.2

Khala's Overall Notes:
Your story is good. I like it and I will probably continue reading it when I'm not busy. You have a way with words and reading it made me feel like I'm not forgetting anything important. I like that about this story. Like Jasmine, the only thing I'd said about the grammar is the commas. I won't say much about it since Jasmine basically said everything and I agree with her. I like that the story has humor in it as I love reading humorous books, so, I quite enjoy it.

I like the cover, and I feel like it fits well with the story. You made it so that we can see the title clear enough. The summary is written well. You didn't spoil the book you put enough information to keep the reader on their toes. The story is amazing and you are a great writer. You are amazing and I enjoyed the 5 chapters I read. Continue being this great.

Overall Rating 4.8 + 4.2  = 9/10