The Autumn Awards Season 1 (CLOSED)

🌺 Short Story Results: Part 2 🌺

Hello and good afternoon, participants! 🤗❤

Thank you to our dearest judge Legendary_Em-Jay for taking his precious time to read and judge the books!

Without further ado, here are the results for Short Story entries:

1. The Guy I Met At Bulaong Terminal by fharniee319

Book Cover - 5
Title - 4
Blurb - 5
Relevance to the Genre - 15
Plot Uniqueness & Creativity - 15
Writing Style - 15
Flow - 15
Enjoyment - 15
Overall - 15
Total: 99

Feedback:

I'll be honest here. The first time I read the title,  i said to myself, i-last natin ito. (Sorry dahil masyado akong judgemental). And, ayon, sa first batch na binasa ko, ito talaga ang huli kong binasa and upon reading it, napahiya ako sa sarili ko dahil sobrang ganda ng story, I love the way how you gave justice to your readers. May kanya-kanya silang characteristics, and such.

I also love how love how you explained every details dahil nadadala ako sa kwento.

Iyon lang, and keep rocking with the waves 🖤💙

I'm rooting for your success.

2.  Wedding Perform by SeniorCarta

Book Cover - 5
Title - 4
Blurb - 5
Relevance to the Genre - 15
Plot Uniqueness & Creativity - 14
Writing Style - 14
Flow - 14
Enjoyment - 14
Overall - 14
Total: 94

Feedback:

I love the book cover, the title, the story itself to the point na halos sapakin na kita dahil bakit hindi sila nagkatuluyan? (Joke) medyo pumalya ka nga lang sa writing style and flow. You don't have to bold the dialogues just yo emphasize that it is a dialogue dahil ayos nang gamitin ang quotation marks para ipakita na dialogues iyon.

Karagdagan. Sa last part, mag-switch bigla ang narrator/POV (though walang batas sa writing na bawal iyon) medyo ang ano lang kasi biglaang nag switch ang narrator tapos bigla pang naging 7 years after.

I suggest you to use, flash back. Kumbaga, sa first chapter, i-narrate mo iyong lalaki na naghihintay sa babaeng magsabi ng I do, tapos kunwari, naiiyak siya then, ipasok mo na iyong 7 years ago, iyong wedding Perform, or mag-isip ka pa ng ibang paraan para mas mapaganda ang story mo.

Iyon lang, keep rocking with the waves 🖤💙 I'm rooting for your success.

3.  Force To Love by Waanjai_Erottika

Book Cover - 3
Title - 4
Blurb - 3
Relevance to the Genre - 15
Plot Uniqueness & Creativity - 13
Writing Style - 12
Flow - 14
Enjoyment - 10
Overall - 12
Total: 81

Feedback:

I love the flow of the story. Medyo marami nga lang errors, though it's okay kasi english version iyong story and tagalog ang nakasanayan natin. Furthermore, (please don't be offended here) I noticed that, the story doesn't look like a bl. Kung hindi ko lang alam ang he/she, aakalain kong babae si Gulf dahil ginawa mo siyang sobrang babaeng-babae where in fact, kahit gay or bi ang isang lalaki, still, lalaki pa rin siya. Base sa observation ko kasi mostly, bakla ang friends ko. Plus, medyo hindi siya credible kasi, alam naman natin na masyadong homophobic ang mundo, so, paanong parang normal lang sa parents, sa lugar na ginagalawan nila ang ganoong relasyon? (I'm not against LGBTQ)

One more thing, paanong mismong iyong parents ang mag-a arrange ng marriage, when they are a well known family? We are all aware that a well known family must protect their image from the people surround them, so paano? I guess, much better if gagawa ka ng lugar na kung saan, normal lang at hindi ginagawang taboo ang relationship na ganyan para makaiwas ng maraming tanong. All in all, the story is good.

Keep it up and keep rocking with the waves 🖤💙
I'm rooting for your success.
 

4. 100 Days With You by Brave_Feather

Book Cover - 5
Title - 5
Blurb - 3 
Relevance to the Genre - 15
Plot Uniqueness & Creativity - 10
Writing Style - 14
Flow - 14
Enjoyment - 10
Overall - 14
Total: 85

Feedback:

I love the book cover it's just that, the reasons why I gave you that score was, because of these...

The characters are almost perfect maliban lang sa maarte, mataray/ pangit na ugali ng babae pero kapag nakilala, malalaman mong mabait naman pala. Tapos iyong lalaki naman, babaero na almost perfect which is, walang gano'n in reality. Also, hindi rin credible para sa'kin iyong followers nila sa Ig na dinaig pa ang followers ng mga artista.

Sa description naman, gaya ng sinabi ko sa'yo noon, masyadong nakaka-spoil sa sobrang haba.

Iyon lang, keep rocking with the waves 🖤💙 and keep it up, I'm rooting for your success.

5.  Entirely Occupied by jazzasambadi

Book Cover - 5
Title - 5
Blurb - 4
Relevance to the Genre - 15
Plot Uniqueness & Creativity - 13
Writing Style - 13
Flow - 14
Enjoyment - 13
Overall - 14
Total: 91

Feedback:
 
The book cover is nice, I also love its title, medyo pumalya ka nga lang sa writing style at sa flow.
Medyo nahirapan ako sa pagbabasa dahil sa bold fonts. Pabigla-biglang malaki, mamaya, maliit na naman dahil sa bino-bold mo iyong dialogues which is, hindi naman kailangan. Okay na iyong quotation marks para ipakita na dialogues siya.

Suggestion: Iwasan ang pabago-bago ng narrator/POV specially sa last chapter where in, pang-ilang beses na nag-switch ang narrator. If okay, gamitin mo na lang ay third POV para maiwasan ang pabigla-biglang switch, tapos balik ulit sa main narrator.

Another suggestion, iyong bold font. May ibang readers, isa na ako ro'n na nahihirapan magbasa kapag gano'n ang style ng binabasa. (specially if foncy fonts na ang ginamit) it's okay to use bold fonts kaso huwag sanang sobrahan. Thanks.

Keep rocking with the waves 🖤💙, I'm rooting for your success.