Great job at capturing my attention! The story line was really interesting! Once those errors are corrected, I'm sure the story will be awesome!
Great job on the pirate-slang. The way they talked and all of the detail and description that's put into the story really helped me envision what it would be like to live there, and to be them.
The way the characters are described made me feel for them. Happy, sad, angry, and wanting to get revenge on an old lady. (Hehe.) I also felt their pain, and suffering. The way their pain is projected into the story is amazing, so good job!
Overall, this story is well written, very descriptive, and has lots of action. You should read it. Like right now. Go on. Read it :)
