The Alpha And Omega Of Magic

The Alpha And Omega Of Magic

14 Part Story 49.6K Reads 1.9K Votes
Mona By TigerBee Completed

"You're taking a risk . . . a very fatal risk." Dartel's voice rang in her ears.
    
    Shawna Tucker is at a new school for the gifted. When she comes across an age old Kyanite stone, she decides to keep it a secret. The unexpected occurs when she is transported to Laiezant—a jewel town studded between exquisite vineyards. As history repeats itself and truths of deep depths are unfolded, Shawna is on a whirlwind where she rediscovers thrill and romance.

racheldesiree racheldesiree Apr 19, 2014 11:34AM
Oh gosh this just brings me back to English class on Mondays, for when it's time we learn about Descriptive Writing. :')
I love your book a lot.It's very creative and interesting to read.Keep up the good work!
carikitty carikitty Jan 16, 2013 10:57AM
no error at all. the pacing is good too. the only thing i noticed is the spacing between each paragraph. you might want to minimize them to make it more look, professional. hope that helps
Collision Collision Jan 01, 2013 10:31AM
This is just... wow! x) You have some serious talent, my friend :) Even though I'm not too keen on reading these types of stories, I'm already hooked on this one! xD Good job!
taliciaem taliciaem Dec 15, 2012 05:43PM
I love this beginning!! Short and sweet too. Excellent job keeping the tense as well. That is something I really struggle with in my writing. Your writing style is fantastic btw! :)
NightRose154 NightRose154 Dec 10, 2012 03:07PM
This is a really interesting prologue! The descriptions are really great and its really well written too! I'm intrigued to know what will happen next! :D