Yesterday's Prince

Yesterday's Prince

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HD Lynn By hlynn117 Updated 5 days ago

What would you do if your body and your kingdom were stolen?
  
  [A FEATURED STORY]
    
  Uther is a young prince who's reluctantly thrust into having to defend his throne against his usurping uncle and all-around powerful wizard, who uses his powers to steal the one thing Uther thought he couldn't take: his own body. After becoming the villain of the realm in an instant, Uther struggles to find anyone that will believe his story. His uncle's unsavory reputation lands him with a family of dark fae, a goblin, and a troll--not the usual team of knightly heroes.
    
  Together, this odd team will untangle a web of curses, escape bounty hunters, and confront fae. If Uther can't figure out how to reverse his uncle's curse, he'll be trapped in a body that's not his own--doomed to be a villain--for the rest of his life.
    
  YESTERDAY'S PRINCE is The Sword in the Stone with a Freaky Friday twist. Now entered in #Wattys2016

This is where Uther's curse really starts to come into play, so maybe describe it a little more clearly. If you don't, it will just sound like he's having trouble speaking through the gag, not that he's acutally cursed.
Is there a reason this is cut off from the rest of the paragraph? Becasue once again, it's still part of the same general thought.
Maybe make the Heron spooking the horse a bit more clear? Maybe that it flew at it's face or something?
Don't know why this sticks out to me, but I'd make this motion a bit more specific.
I loved this whole description. Nothing to comment on, but if you want to find a way to work the word "Resonant" into your description of her voice, I think it would really clearly convey what you're trying to picture.
Based on your description of this world, I'm assuming its more medieval, and I don't think they'd actually have socks. Maybe something like socks, idk, but if I were you I'd choose something that you know they wore. Like shoes, or undergarments.