Broken Wings

Broken Wings

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Ellie By ellieerose_ Completed

It started on a night with broken glass.

First the glass, then the screams, and then the blood. And then, their lives were changed forever.

It marked the beginning of her brother's suffering.

As Else Schüffen struggles to define everything that is happening around her in Germany 1941, Maximilian faces a different kind of struggle. 

An adopted Jew in a Christian family, Max faces betrayal and loss, forgiveness and anger. Being a divided family with a Nazi as a brother, his fears become a reality. He must go into hiding, but with a different identity: Henrik Brandenburg, an Aryan shopkeeper.

And then there's Else, a young Aryan girl, in the midst of her brother's tumult. Painting, it seems, is the only way of escape, and the only way to keep her brother, Maximilian, in her heart forever. Through it all, there is one thing she learns. Sometimes, in order to survive, we must repair our broken wings and learn to fly again~

 #39 in historical fiction//March 29th

Edited by the lovely @jgfairytales

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SamMaze SamMaze Jul 31, 2016
I would suggest adding in a visual detail here, such as: "Youth and innocent dotted her face like freckles/alongside her freckles/etc."
SamMaze SamMaze Jul 31, 2016
You could add more here, to hint at an ominous event or thing to come.
SamMaze SamMaze Jul 31, 2016
This comma should be cut (since it indicates a pause where none is needed).
SamMaze SamMaze Jul 31, 2016
You use the word "pastry" twice in very close proximity. Try to swap out one of them with a different word.
SamMaze SamMaze Jul 31, 2016
More details about the flags themselves would add more depth to the scene.
SamMaze SamMaze Jul 31, 2016
This bit here is basically repeating the first line. I think it would be best if it were reworded.