"Well, I'd like to have you forever," I whispered, turning my gaze towards him. Nothing in his gaze flinched. His lips turned into the slightest smile.
Is a bit of a short chapter, but the grammar and the punctuation are close to perfect. You talk about the thoughts of characters well, but could use a bit more dialogue.
I liked it alot!
This chapter was so sweet. I like how the emotions feel genuine while she talks. The two seem like a real couple just heads over heels about each other. This had such a romantic feel to it, I cant help but go to the next chapter feeling like something might go downhill. Wonderful work by the way! :)
The description for this chapter was very on point.
The relationship is definitely cute. And not to mention written well.
Though there is a lack of dialogue, I personally think it paves the way for the chapter to be told in the excellent way it has been told.
Aww that was such a cute chapter. I really liked how you told us a bit about their pasts but also had current stuff at the same time. I'm excited to see what happens to them and their relationship
Aw! Alex and the narrator seem so cute, I totally ship! There were a few typos though, but great book! The chapter is also a bit short. It's really cute though!!
I'm a sucker for the whole, "This might have worked out for everyone else in the sun, but this is my reality/story" vibes. Liking it so far.