Lay's Critique Shop 2020 (OPE...

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FORM
PAYMENT
CRITERIA
RULES
INFORMATION DESK
RECOMMENDED STORIES
SCOREBOARDS
Hacienda El Cielo: Heart of Thirst
The Beauty Within
That Quirky Love Story
This Love is Golden
Enigmatic Trip
DREAM HIGH: The Tip-off
He's A Monster
Alert
In love to a girl with a Mental Disorder
Werewolf's Lullaby
11 Things I Hate About You
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Before We Split Up
'Til The End of Our Song
Underground Society
Dark Realm
The Three Nonsense Questions
Missing One Person
Tantalizing
Off Limits
Someday I'll be a Star
The Death of Solace
Losing to Win
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[WARNING]
La Casa de Carnales: Enzo Zavala
Daughter of Dusk and Dawn
The First or Great Love
The Red Dragon Princess
PRAYER
RULE BREAKER
Secret Agent Series #2: His Uncontrollable Craving
Memories To Last
The Earthquake Survivor
Disorder
Against Time
On My 18th
Crescent Rose
She's The Real Challenge
Save Me (Montiero Series #1)
Stella: Heads Down
Way Back Till Now
The Tale of Creation and Destruction
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NOTE, YOU NEED TO READ THIS (not an update, still, you need to read this)
Noxious
Turn Back Time
Famous For Nothing
Falta Algo: The Game of Classics (Series #1)
The Mysterious Book of Alia Madrianna
Just One Drop
To Fall Again
Mahal kong Aurora
Goiteia University
Maghihintay Ako
Taste of Reality
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Poisoned Apple
Munsysturia Dimension
Palace: A Battlefield
Apollo Zapata
Triton Ventura
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Sleepless Nights

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By leollaaaay

Sleepless Nights
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General Fiction
Completed

1. Book Cover — I like the book cover, it's very attractive but... It's like it wasn't a book cover at all and a movie poster.

2. Title — I like the how the title is giving us the mysterious vibes, somehow, even thou it wasn't a Mystery/Thriller story, it's a good indication for a good General Fiction story.

3. Grammar — well, I was — and still am pretty impressed with your grammar. Job well done! Thou, I was shocked when I read that it's on English Language (like all of them, I wasn't prepared).

4. Contents — the story flow is interesting... The story is realistic enough for a fiction story, but, it's a bit dull. You're just narrating, telling... You need to show your readers what's the story is, not just describe it.

5. Overall Impact — it's a great story and amazing plot, thou you should really try to show the story using the art of writing. You don't need to use lots of metaphors to show it, just think what will you do if you're the character (considering the character's attitude). :)))

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Book Cover       : 16/10
Title                    : 17/20
Grammar          : 35/35
Contents            : 20/25
Overall Impact: 07/10
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Total Score       : 85/100

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