Alternative Care - jettmanas
Calamity | The 125th Hunger Games - CherryQueen55
Intelligence Isn't a Magical Thing - Flutterbolt667
JohnLock: The Prince and His Personal Guardian - CarrieGChandler
The 7 Princes - pinkskyjihye
The Broken Diaries - sadcookii3
The DNA Test (WDW Fan - Fiction) - Happysmile4721
The Girl He Left Behind - marialoveswednesdays
The Star Wars: The Prophecy of the Three - BluePearl22
The Selection - lolamaddie
The Traveling Lan's Galactic Tour - CynkNapp
Weird Short Stories - WeirderMum
Alternative Care - jettmanas
JUDGE: Lily-B28
- almost no mistakes, easy words to understand.
- compared to your other books they are somewhat the same but I feel like this compared to others work is still unique.
- I do know these characters from when I watched them as a kid, but you did an amazing job describing them and giving a bit of a backstory and through out even the first few chapters it really gave me an idea of who they were, and later on how they changed.
- easy to read/follow.
- this kind of book isn't my go to, but I did find it interesting and somewhat intriguing, i understand why it has so many reads! There is amazing dicription words and vivid imagery going through my head while reading this book, well done.
JUDGE: anonymous
GRAMMAR
a few odd constructions, but nothing very distracting (two dialogue tags in the same sentence/clover asked perplexed and the blond(e) gestured with an open palm.
UNIQUENESS OF THE PLOT
Haven't a clue on this type of fanfict but the story flowed and there was a plot
CHaracter building
not sure if these characters will have an arc as they are pretty established but each seemed to have their own speaking voice.
writing style
Well written teen Drama
overall enjoyment
for lovers of this genre they would enjoy this well written book
Calamity | The 125th Hunger Games - CherryQueen55
JUDGE:
• DETECTED NO MISTAKES
• AUTHOR MADE IT HER OWN
• WHY DID SHE NOT NOTICE HER FRIEND MISSING ON THE BUS
• SPOT ION DESCRIPTIVE SAW THE SCENES UNFOLDING
• WELL WRITTEN, PLENTY OF DESCRIPTIONS, THE STORY WAS VERY INTERESTING
Intelligence Isn't a Magical Thing - Flutterbolt667
JUDGE: Lily-B28
- punctuation was good along with capalization. Well written and easy to understand word choice.
- I haven't read any books about these characters, but I do feel like they were created before hand (this would be a great fan fiction).
- description of characters looks, personality, and backstories were phenomenal. I watched them grow through out the first couple of chapters and thought you did very good in the way the plot moved.
- again plot moved along at a good pace, I understood everything I was reading.
- I really enjoyed this story. All of the following criteria, as seen, so high shows just how great of a book I think this is. Continue to correct and revise your work.
JUDGE: anonymous
GRAMMAR
the book was in 3rd person it seemed like limited in some points and omipresent in others
UNIQUENESS OF THE PLOT
Couldn't tell what the plot was- falling for each other?
CHaracter building
had a hard time telling who was who as little points about them were awkwardly interjected without reference Magical friend/science lover)
writing style
Not bad- nned to invoke some atmosphere and the senses, tighten up on the grammar and use of punctuation
overall enjoyment
if the plot were cleared up and actual names were used at least in the begining to get the characters straight it might be a good read
JohnLock: The Prince and His Personal Guardian - CarrieGChandler
JUDGE: Happysmile4721
This is an amazing book! It's very descriptive and has no grammar mistakes (that I've noticed). Since it's set in the past, I didn't understand certain terms/words. I really enjoyed this book and am already reading the sequel.
The 7 Princes - pinkskyjihye
JUDGE: -
• structure lacking/rules not followed ellipses need three dots not two lower case "i"
• the structre was so distracting i couldn't follow the plot
• i didn't see much of bts chAracters in the first few chapters-a pity
• could not recognize one
• no real plot/no structure/ made a little sense but things were too convenient (cousin training at the palace as well?)
The Broken Diaries - sadcookii3
JUDGE: Lily-B28
- very well written, few mistakes.
- book was more so poetry(even though you stared it wasn't) and I feel like your quotes were very personal, overall uniqueness was fairly high. Although a little dark/depressing I get where you are coming from.
- no character was made here, this is a compilation of quotes and sayings.
- small blurbs, not a story. I'm sorry but I feel like this is in the wrong category. More suitable for poetry or other.
- although depressing, I actually really enjoyed reading this, (not in a twisted way...) EXTRA: I hope you have someone to talk to about your struggles and your thoughts, I'm always here as a judge but also as a friend.
JUDGE: anonymous
GRAMMAR
the author needs to watch her contraction usage. (e.g. they're-they are)
UNIQUENESS OF THE PLOT
seen this type of book before, but the author has made it her own
Character building
the story is the broken diaries but if it is interspersed with some happiness, that would uplift readers enough to keep reading.
writing style
the author wrote about truisms in her life. I've seen this style but the emoji's made it cute. if the author ever considered putting the text on a unique banner the story would pop.
overall enjoyment
a book of statements. some of them profound, others not so much as they were very similar to others
The DNA Test (WDW Fan - Fiction) - Happysmile4721
JUDGE:
GRAMMAR
Huge paragraphs. No quotes around spoken text. No grammar rules followed. This would be better suited as text messages or something
UNIQUENESS OF THE PLOT
If Corbyn Besson is her half-brother, did her mom cheat? How does her dad feel? How did Corbyn know? Why did he take a test? These questions should be fleshed out- a sentence or two would do the trick.
Character building
Everything about the character was stated in the first first
paragraph- this gives readers no chance to imagine someone they can relate to.
writing style
could not recognize one
overall enjoyment
no real plot/no structure/ made no sense
The Girl He Left Behind - marialoveswednesdays
JUDGE:
GRAMMAR
lack of necessary capitalization/wrong ellipses usage/ quotes not spaced correctly in some places
UNIQUENESS OF THE PLOT
the first chapter was so cute and then the second chapter killed it with the "sudden move letter" too bad. many convenient areas- never bringing up ross to your new best friend?
CHARACTER BUILDING
characters were fleshed out enough that they had their own personalities
WRITING STYLE
could not recognize one
OVERALL ENJOYMENT
this could have been so cute but was ruined by a convenient plot seen many times before
The Star Wars: The Prophecy of the Three - BluePearl22
JUDGE:
GRAMMAR
A few typos, nut nothing to distracting. A few instances were two characters spoke in the same paragraph.
UNIQUENESS OF THE PLOT
A canon with familiar faces. the author made the plot her own
CHARACTER BUILDING
was thrown off by one character. she disappeared during one crucial scene and her attitude toward Luke was, to me, way out of character, even if she was worried (at least toward Luke)
WRITING STYLE
The author didn't use the familiarity of the characters to spur the story on, but created a visual world around them.
OVERALL ENJOYMENT
I liked this canon with its hint of magical mystery. the chapters I read kept had me wondering what would happen next.
The Selection - lolamaddie
JUDGE:
• no separation of speakers. huge paragraphs. no explanation of the selection. what is illean events? not everyone reads the blurb
• not sure what her motivation WAS for leaving illea. all info about the mc introduced in a list- seen that many, many times
• people are introduced without any background information. need to build the world for the ground up. don't assume your readers will know what you are talking about
• writing style - could not recognize one
• no real plot/no structure/ made no sense
The Traveling Lan's Galactic Tour - CynkNapp
JUDGE: Lily-B28
- the grammar was fairly good, word choice was sometimes difficult to understand, but very good overall.
- I have never read a book about this 'LAN' before so I found it very unique. Is this a plot/character you came up with on your own because I found my self lost at some points with no direction.
- there was very little talk about what the main character looked like, other characters we described somewhat. overall, next time (or when editing this book) try to really tell me about this person.
- writing style was fairly good, as stated before, some words were confusing. Try using more 'normal' words:. Kept in the same tense.
- I would like to apologize for the low mark, to me this book is a little confusing and I couldn't keep up with what was happening. Difficult words made it hard for me to understand what was going on at some points and I feel like it was almost missing multiple parts (eg.backstory could have been helpful).
JUDGE: anonymous
GRAMMAR 4
The book was written in a dry way—how I would equate a Vulcan to write. In the first chapter, there were a lot of instances of the same words being used in close proximity. If the first few paragraphs were rewritten, readers who liked a story such as this would be drawn in more.
UNIQUENESS OF THE PLOT 4.5
A completely made up world with visual characters and a narrorator that roams the universe
Character building 4.5
A completely made up world with visual characters and a narrator that roams the universe
writing style 5
the character had a personality and chard despite his matter of fact outlook on his surroundings
overall enjoyment 9
this is a made up world full of unique creators. the author brought his/her a game by making writing in such a way that the dryness of the narrator didn't bog the story down but uplifted it. Not an easy feat!
FINAL SCORE 27
impressive. i kept seeing the guy from the IT Crowd (Richard Ayoade) spew off this narrative in that droll way of his. It Endeared me to the story. The author has achieved a feat of having the courage to write such a story that in the first instance is as dry as Sauvignon Blanc but the humor the author infuses into the book makes it an indecorous bard worth reading.
Weird Short Stories - WeirderMum
JUDGE:
• NEED TO WATCH THE PUNTUATION AROUND THE QUOTATION MARKS
• VERY UNIQUE STORIES. I HAVEN'T SEEN THEM ANYWHERE
• THE STORIES STAYED WITH ME LONG AFTER I READ THEM
• PAST MINGLED WITH PRESENT IN SOME SPOTS
• REALLY ENJOYED THE UNIQUE STORIES!