The results for Action/Adventure are out! Thank you CrimsonShadowMask !
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Words from the judge- As a judge, I was impressed by the level of talent displayed in these works. The authors have all shown a strong command of language, a creative use of imagery, and an ability to weave complex plot lines. Each piece showcased a unique style and voice, making the task of selecting a winner challenging, but ultimately rewarding.
I encourage each author to continue writing and to pursue their craft with passion and dedication. Writing is a lifelong journey, and the journey itself is as important as the destination. I look forward to seeing how these authors grow and develop their skills in the future.
Thank you to all the participants for sharing their works with me, and I wish you all the best in your writing endeavors!
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Lawless Heaven by AshlynLynx
1.) Cover: 3/5
2.) Title: 3 /5
3.) Blurb: 8/10
4.) Opening: 7/10
5.) Grammar: 13/15
6.) Writing Style: 12/15
7.) Characters: 11/15
8.) Storyline: 17/20
9.) Overal Impression: 3/5
Total: 77/100
In Lawless Heaven by @AshlynLynx, the author skillfully creates a dark and complex tone that draws the reader in. The detailed descriptions and well-crafted characters make for an engaging read. However, there were some aspects of the story that left me wanting more.
The end of the story seemed abrupt, and I was left with questions about Eli's decision to jump overboard and the identity of the Fellow. Additionally, the quote about Christians at the beginning of the story felt disconnected from the rest of the plot. The introduction of pirates at the end of the story also felt out of place with the beginning. Further exploration of the characters and more elaboration on the quotes would have strengthened the story.
Despite these shortcomings, Lawless Heaven has many strengths. The author's use of complex vocabulary and unique voice added to the overall atmosphere of the story. The characters felt realistic and were well-developed, particularly Eli, who had a complicated history with Melody, and the mysterious Fellow. Rebecca, another character introduced on the ship, was also captivating as a sly character who enchanted Amias.
In conclusion, Lawless Heaven is a well-written and engaging story with complex characters and a dark tone. While there were some unresolved plot points and disconnected elements, the author's use of language and character development made for a compelling read.
Jackle Jim by JohanLiebert33
1.) Cover: 5/5
2.) Title: 3/5
3.) Blurb: 8/10
4.) Opening: 7/10
5.) Grammar: 13/15
6.) Writing Style: 12/15
7.) Characters: 12/15
8.) Storyline: 17/20
9.) Overal Impression: 3/5
Total: 79/100
In Jackle Jim: The Hunt is On by @JohanLiebert33, the striking cover immediately catches the reader's attention. The author's use of vocabulary is impressive, although there were some minor punctuation errors.
The characters are aesthetically pleasing, and the graphics are visually appealing, contributing to the overall quality of the story. The plot is well-crafted and immediately dives into action, with side characters introduced in a seamless manner. The dialogue is well-written and adds depth to the characters, making it easy for the reader to form an emotional connection with them.
Overall, Jackle Jim: The Hunt is On is an engaging and well-crafted story. The cover art and character aesthetics are visually stunning, and the plot is well-paced, quickly jumping into action. The side characters are introduced seamlessly, and the dialogue is well-written, allowing the reader to form an emotional connection with the characters. While there were some minor punctuation errors, the author's use of vocabulary is impressive.
Small Paws, Big Pride by TheWordArtistBooks
1.) Cover: 3/5
2.) Title: 5/5
3.) Blurb: 8/10
4.) Opening: 7/10
5.) Grammar: 13/15
6.) Writing Style: 13/15
7.) Characters: 12/15
8.) Storyline: 19/20
9.) Overal Impression: 4/5
Total: 84/100
Small Paws, Big Pride by @TheWordArtistBooks is an engaging book with a simple yet attractive cover and a brief blurb that provides some insight into the story. The book is action-packed, with the fighting scenes between the wolves being the highlights of the story. The use of vocabulary is impressive and adds depth to the characters and the story as a whole.
The author does a commendable job of introducing side characters and explaining the context of the story. However, there are some terms that can be confusing, and while the author does explain them well, it can become confusing when done in the comment section. To overcome this, the author could create a glossary with any unfamiliar terms or place all the confusing terms at the beginning or end of each chapter.
The plot is extremely interesting, with different characters that have varying personalities. The author gives each character their own distinct voice, making them relatable and endearing. The antagonist, Black, is a well-crafted character, and the author portrays his bullying tendencies perfectly. This makes the reader dislike the character and sympathize with the protagonist, which is a testament to the author's skill in character development.
Despite some punctuation and grammar errors, the overall quality of the story is impressive. The dialogue is natural and engaging, and the emotional connection between characters is evident. The author weaves a complex and engaging story, and the reader is drawn in from the first page.
In conclusion, Small Paws, Big Pride is an engaging read with well-written action scenes, effective characterization, and a complex plot that keeps the reader invested. Despite some minor errors, the author's use of vocabulary and ability to develop characters make this a must-read for anyone who enjoys a good action story.
The hunter song by OloosDomain
1.) Cover: 3/5
2.) Title: 4/5
3.) Blurb: 8/10
4.) Opening: 7/10
5.) Grammar: 13/15
6.) Writing Style: 12/15
7.) Characters: 13/15
8.) Storyline: 17/20
9.) Overal Impression: 3/5
Total: 80/100
Review of "The Hunter Song" by @OloosDomain:
Overall, the book shows promise with its good vocabulary, well-written dialogue, and descriptive scenes. However, there are some slight punctuation errors that could be corrected to improve the overall readability of the book.
While the blurb creates an air of mystery, it starts with the pronoun "she" instead of the name of the protagonist. Adding the name or even the breed of the protagonist (since there are magical creatures in the story) somewhere in the plot would have helped readers better connect with the character.
The pacing of the story could also be improved by spacing longer chapters as it can be confusing for readers. Some context is missing in the early chapters, but the assumption is that it is explained in later chapters. Nonetheless, the author does a good job of explaining the magical creatures that may not be familiar to all readers.
The protagonist's character is well-developed, but some other characters could use a bit more exploration. The book's context and some events would have made more sense if additional details were provided earlier in the story. Despite this, the author has done a good job of creating a unique and intriguing world that readers will want to explore further.
THE MUSTY SHRELANKA (SBSP) by uselessdeadones
1.) Cover: 2/5
2.) Title: 4/5
3.) Blurb: 3/10
4.) Opening: 6/10
5.) Grammar: 10/15
6.) Writing Style: 11/15
7.) Characters: 10/15
8.) Storyline: 15/20
9.) Overal Impression: 2/5
Total: 63/100
THE MUSTY SHRELANKA (SBSP) by @uselessdeadones is an interesting book with an unusual plot that caught my attention right from the start. However, I have to admit that I didn't enjoy it as much as I expected to.
Firstly, I think that the book cover and blurb could be improved to better represent the book and attract potential readers. While the starting of the book was nice and had a good pace, I felt that the characters were a bit too rushed and not developed enough, which made it hard to fully connect with them. Despite this, I found Y/N's funny personality to be quite enjoyable, and the humor throughout the book was fantastic.
I appreciate the effort put into the dialogue and descriptions, which were well-written and engaging. The book is definitely unusual, which can be a good thing, but it didn't completely resonate with me. Additionally, while the blurb provided some insight into the plot, it could have been improved to better capture the essence of the book.
Overall, THE MUSTY SHRELANKA (SBSP) has its strengths, such as the humor and unique plot, but I feel that there is room for improvement in terms of character development and marketing. While I personally didn't enjoy it as much as I hoped, I still think that other readers may find it interesting and worth checking out.
Project Nodachi by camosenseii
1.) Cover: 3/5
2.) Title: 5/5
3.) Blurb: 9/10
4.) Opening: 7/10
5.) Grammar: 12/15
6.) Writing Style: 13/15
7.) Characters: 12/15
8.) Storyline: 19/20
9.) Overal Impression: 4/5
Total: 84/100
Project Nodachi by @camosenseii is a book that truly captures the reader's attention from the start. The simple yet elegant cover design immediately grabs one's attention, and the author delivers the context of the story very nicely. The vocabulary used throughout the book is commendable, and the author's attention to detail is quite impressive. However, there are some instances where the paragraphs are too long, which could lead to the reader losing their focus.
The author does a great job of introducing the side characters without revealing too much, keeping the readers satisfied and curious at the same time. The protagonist, Noda-chan, is a fascinating character with her unique qualities and traits.
While the author uses time skips effectively to advance the story, there are some instances where the transition feels incomplete, leaving the reader wanting more.
The description of the fighting scenes is very well done, written in such a way that the reader feels as if they are transported right to the scene itself. The vivid and detailed nature of the scenes adds to the overall immersive experience of the book. There are some grammar errors, but they do not detract from the overall quality of the writing.
The plot of Project Nodachi is unique and interesting, adding to the overall appeal of the book. The author keeps the reader engaged and guessing throughout the story, and the ending ties up loose ends effectively.
Overall, Project Nodachi is a well-written and engaging book that is definitely worth the read.
Paranormal Shifts by CleoNA924
1.) Cover: 2/5
2.) Title: 4/5
3.) Blurb: 6/10
4.) Opening: 7/10
5.) Grammar: 11/15
6.) Writing Style: 12/15
7.) Characters: 9/15
8.) Storyline: 11/20
9.) Overal Impression: 2/5
Total: 64/100
Paranormal Shifts by @CleoNA924 is an intriguing book that could benefit from some editing to reach its full potential. The blurb is interesting but could be more detailed to give potential readers a better understanding of what the book is about. The cover is also lacking text and the book's title, which may make it difficult for readers to identify the book.
The prologue is well-written and sets a mysterious and intriguing tone for the story. The author does a good job of introducing side characters and providing physical descriptions that help readers visualize the characters. However, one suggestion would be to avoid starting dialogues in the middle of long chapters, as it can be confusing for readers to keep track of who is speaking.
There is some inconsistency in the portrayal of characters, particularly with the five-year-old who seemingly understood her father's death despite being too young to comprehend it fully. However, the author does well to create a good amount of mystery in the prologue, where no names are mentioned, leaving readers wanting more.
The book has a good balance of description and dialogue, although some pacing issues arise when introducing gods and other creatures. The author could slow down the pace and provide more context before introducing these supernatural beings. Additionally, starting dialogues in new paragraphs could help avoid confusion and clarify who is speaking.
Overall, with some serious editing, Paranormal Shifts has the potential to be a great book that captivates readers with its intriguing plot and well-crafted characters.
X0X0 (TECH DEMO EDITION) by ADZIThePoet
1.) Cover: 2/5
2.) Title: 3/5
3.) Blurb: 7/10
4.) Opening: 7/10
5.) Grammar: 13/15
6.) Writing Style: 13/15
7.) Characters: 15/15
8.) Storyline: 17/20
9.) Overal Impression: 4/5
Total: 81/100
"X0X0 (TECH DEMO EDITION)" by @ADZIThePoet is a delightful read that offers an intriguing mix of humor, action, and suspense. The author's use of humor in this chapter is particularly noteworthy, as it keeps the reader engaged and entertained throughout the story. Additionally, the author's skillful use of descriptions and dialogue helps to bring the characters to life and creates a vivid picture of the story's world.
The protagonist, in particular, stands out with their sarcastic humor and witty inner dialogue. The author has done a great job of using italics to distinguish between the protagonist's thoughts and dialogue, which makes the reading experience more enjoyable and less confusing.
The side characters are also well introduced, and the plot is both interesting and well-paced. The author's attention to detail, especially in terms of punctuation and grammar, adds to the overall quality of the work.
However, while the writing itself is excellent, the cover design could be improved. The cover appears a bit gaudy and does not quite match the color scheme of the story. With a more fitting cover, this book could attract even more readers.
Overall, "X0X0 (TECH DEMO EDITION)" is an enjoyable and well-crafted read that I would highly recommend to anyone looking for a fresh and exciting story.
~WINNERS~
Second Place
A Socipath's Love by CrysTravel2019
1.) Cover: 3/5
2.) Title: 5/5
3.) Blurb: 9.5/10
4.) Opening: 7/10
5.) Grammar: 13/15
6.) Writing Style: 13/15
7.) Characters: 15/15
8.) Storyline: 20/20
9.) Overal Impression: 4/5
total- 89.5/100
I appreciate the author's adeptness in utilizing the perspective of the antagonist as the protagonist, creating a compelling narrative. Ferenc Nadasy, the character in question, is a villain whose presence I would not want to encounter. The author skillfully crafted one of the most remarkable antagonists I have seen, taking the reader on a perilous journey into the mind of a sociopath and sadist. Despite his alluring physical attributes, Ferenc's initial appearance left me with a chilling feeling, reminding me of the seductive Latin male characters in romantic literature, but with a sinister side.
The author's reflection of Ferenc's sick thought processes and pathological tendencies was exceptional, providing a vivid portrayal of his character. He was a cruel and vicious antagonist, who reveled in torturing and abusing his victims, particularly females, leading them to an untimely end. Ferenc cleverly hid his murderous and troubled soul behind a façade of charm and wealth, luring the reader into a terrifying path of redemption that could only be found through an unexpected heroine.
While the author skillfully portrays Ferenc's villainous traits, there is an opportunity to add more depth to his character. It may be worth exploring some positive aspects of his personality to help the reader sympathize with his situation. For instance, delving into his inner thoughts and providing insight into his motivations could be useful.
Overall, the author has created a captivating narrative that showcases a remarkable antagonist. The character's alluring façade and sinister personality make for a fascinating read, leaving the reader on the edge of their seat. I look forward to seeing more from the author in the future.
FIRST PLACE
Rings of ruin by loveableletters
1.) Cover: 3/5
2.) Title: 5/5
3.) Blurb: 9.5/10
4.) Opening: 7/10
5.) Grammar: 13/15
6.) Writing Style: 15/15
7.) Characters: 15/15
8.) Storyline: 20/20
9.) Overal Impression: 4/5
Total: 91.5/100
Rings of Ruin by @loveableletters is an exciting read that will capture your attention from the very beginning. The blurb, which includes a cleverly chosen quote, promises an engaging story and the author does not disappoint. The descriptions are vivid and the vocabulary impressive, with long paragraphs that allow the reader to fully immerse themselves in the world of the story. The background context is well-presented and adds depth to the narrative.
One of the standout aspects of the book is the author's skillful use of punctuation, which contributes to the flow and readability of the text. The side characters are well-introduced and contribute to the development of the plot. Although the dialogue is engaging, it might benefit from being more prominent in the story, particularly given the strong emotions and feelings of the protagonist and other characters. Nonetheless, the emotions and feelings of the protagonist and Archer are well-described, allowing the reader to sympathize, laugh, and cry in different situations.
Overall, Rings of Ruin is an impressive read that delivers on its promise of an engaging and well-crafted story. The author's attention to detail, both in terms of the narrative and the writing style, make this book a standout. Fans of fantasy and adventure stories will not be disappointed, and those who enjoy well-drawn characters and immersive settings will find much to enjoy in this book. I highly recommend it.
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