Jabberwocky Reviews

When The Cherry Blossoms Bloom by sam_ross99

"What do you do when the last four years of your life vanish before your eyes?

Ben Knightley lost his memory because of a car accident. However, he forgot only a part of his memories, four years of them. With his parents and his best friend trying to make him leave those years behind, he relies his trust on a woman he met the day he woke up at the hospital.

Lena was abandoned by her fiancé and is three months pregnant, she doesn't speak with her parents and feels lonely, trying to figure out how she will be able to raise a child by herself. There's something about Lena that pulls Ben closer to her, but they are just strangers, right?.

With the doubt of the four years Ben forgot, he still wants to know what happened during that time, and he has one clue: Cherry Blossoms."

I thought this was an interesting quick read. Some spelling errors came up—"hum" has one m, for instance—and I know that I said I wasn't going to harp on that sort of thing, but I couldn't find much else to say. You'll find and fix them eventually. This was a nice read.

The ages of the characters is one thing I was a bit confused about, given you call them "baby" and "girl" and stuff that suggests they could be teenagers or otherwise young, but based on how they're described I would think they're older. And I think that leads into my main critique: it's hard to do in such a small word count, certainly, but I feel like we could have a bit more worldbuilding. Who are these people? What do they do? Are they solely defined by amnesia and cherry blossoms? Some more context helps make the characters feel even more three-dimensional and relatable.

Overall I liked this. I'm curious to see where you take it.