Running With the Wave

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Alex By coraltear Completed
In a world where women are imprisoned in order to breed and are taught to fear men, fourteen year old Era discovers that she is barren, and is to be Disposed. Desperate not to die, Era does the unthinkable: she leaves the prison where the women are kept. She knows she must hide, as she is being hunted, but the last thing she expects is to meet handsome, undersanding Hunter. Worse yet, she thinks she might be falling for him. But she must choose between saving her friends or love, and no matter how hard you run, the wave always catches up.
I love the scenarios that you paint with your great use of language. You rock, girl!
This kinda reminds me of the hunger games how it starts. Great details and very visual - well written.
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                                    Oona
I think the description at the beginning allows the reader to imagine it :) It also let's us know how the character feels! One thing that I'm confused about, how old is she? It shows that she's caring the way she helps out the younger girl. So far is good :)
a detailed opening. the story grabs the attention of the reader straight away. keep writing!
i love it so far! There are a few minor spelling errors which can be removed by just reading through it, nothing serious. well done, i love the originality of the plot too!
Always write out your numbers, and I love begin inside watching the rain fall, good details, and saw no errors.