This kinda reminds me of the hunger games how it starts. Great details and very visual - well written. :) Oona
a detailed opening. the story grabs the attention of the reader straight away. keep writing!
Always write out your numbers, and I love begin inside watching the rain fall, good details, and saw no errors.
Very interesting and unique. I love it so far and I really want to know what happens to the disposed. You've got my vote.
I love it ! i really like how u describe stuff 2 so i can actually imagine it in my head sort of like a movie :)
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