Hall guys. This is my first ever fanfic and omg it
Sucks ass. Yes plot is good but bro lots of things wrong with it. I have reread it two or three times and I seriously deeply DEEPLY HATE IT.
Problems
1 y/n is too op - like bro she isn't injured
2 the crimson sword problem - if you get sliced by it once you never regenerate, wrote that wrong!
3 Daki's betrayal to muzan - wrote it the worst way. Doesn't make sense. Because of daki's personality. She won't be that easy to turn good
4 my spelling errors obviously!
5 I see this as too rushed
6 it's very cringy
7 it doesn't have any emotions other than ew op character
So my solution is to rewrite this whole thing.
Will you read the new one I'm gonna make? I'm not trying to force you or anything. It's just that this fanfic is really bad.
YOU ARE READING
I'll save you Douma
FanfictionHighly don't recommend to not read this. This is bad stuff. And really stupid. You have been warned Y/n and douma have been friends since the day y/n stepped in his temple. Douma have been staying at y/n house for some time. Because he felt lonely...
