Game Over.[FINISHED!!!!!]

Game Over.[FINISHED!!!!!]

22 Part Story 8.6K Reads 72 Votes
Vannnna. ;D By veena25001 Completed

When 16 year old Mandy Rachel Hollingsworth is kidnapped, she begins to find that maybe this isn't such a bad thing. With a rough home life, maybe being with these teenage hunks could be good for her! Friend drama, scandals, romance, and conflict can be found inside Game Over.
    
    **Unedited or not finished. Don't bug me about grammer/spelling mistakes please!

bfc3220 bfc3220 Jul 20, 2011 09:53PM
Very good and tense.....Maybe let us feel her pain from the beating a little more?  (That makes me sound so weird..sorry)..lol
bfc3220 bfc3220 Jul 20, 2011 09:45PM
Well written and kept my interest going and wanting to read more.....(so I am)
vandyo vandyo Jun 09, 2011 12:30AM
woowowowow and all i read was the comment and i didnt read it yet but i just now getting started.... :) XOXO savanna
AnnaKSnow AnnaKSnow May 27, 2011 05:35PM
I really like it! A little short.... but that's easy to do. Your descriptions easily pull people in. 
KazKims KazKims May 25, 2011 09:11PM
heeyyy! its realllyy good, but it seem's rushed, i wish we got to know jhonny, alex & mandy a bit more. but great x
SammiSchell501 SammiSchell501 May 25, 2011 07:47PM
It's really good :) I like how you explain a lot of Mandy's thoughts.  Like what she's questioning about where she is and stuff.  I try to do that in my writing more often but sometimes I don't do that well.  Hahha.  Anyways so yeah it's well writen! Great Job :D
                                    -Sam