Guys this story just isn't going to work. No matter which way I twist and turn it the story just doesn't seem good. It's missing something but I can't quite place it! So if any of you want this one continued or maybe would be okay with me giving the story to you message or comment me? I know votes are easier but honestly I have no idea what they would mean in this context.
So I'm going to take this story down at June 23.
I think that's a reasonable amount of time, maybe I'll finally be able to crack this thing open and see what I'm missing. If I can't I'll take this one down.
Ideas, I really need ideas. Please comment some ideas my way?