The Mystical Review Committee

By lead-with-love

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OPEN (!!!!!) Welcome to our committee where we provide you with a chance to show off your beautiful creations... More

WELCOME!!!
REVIEW CRITERIA
RULES
FORMS
CINZEL
Third Eye
Rules aren't Made for Me
Transformers Oneshots
A Summer of Glowing Stars
Resurfaced With His Love
There's nothing I wouldn't Do
But is it worth it for love?
AURORA
VenatiO
The Z Virus
Custom Made For You
Invisible, or Not?
Touch Starved

Deceptible

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By lead-with-love

by harmonic-silence

At first I would like to thank you for giving us a chance. Hope you would keep supporting us throughout our journey.

Reviewer: Arisha_Ibnath

The title is unique and up to the point. And your cover is interesting too. But if you want to attract more readers you can change your cover.

 The blurb is beautiful. From the beginning the story is promised with something amazing and it made it to that. The flow was really good. And what amazed me is how you presented the story from POV to everyone's point of view. I really loved that. But is your story fully complete? I feel like there is more to say. As you didn't mention anything or no authors note.

 Now the story. Its so beautiful and kept me hooked up until I finished reading it. Strong background story of every Character and very breezy. I loved the chemistry between Zach and Aaliya, their dialogues to their relation. It was "Ah--maa--zing". 

 But the last part of the story made me unsatisfied. While Steven and Audra were fighting where was Jayden? She was really, powerful right? I guess Audras screaming made them halt but Jayden's part in this fight was poor show. And Steven kept hitting everybody and the focus was just on him. You can make them a little productive in this fight. Personally I really loved your story from beginning to end. The last part was unsatisfying


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