Cover: I love the title and I'm intrigued by the beautiful choice of colour... The dark background and the pink rose is really giving me a betrayal sort of vibe yet it is exciting to look at.. But it would have been better if the cover showed some kind of vanishing hint to add to the title
Blurb: blurbs are mostly just 100 words long but they are always enough to attract the reader to read the book...I'm not implying that it's bad or anything... I feel like you've put a lot of the story in it.like you should write the part you want to show to the reader and hide the interesting facts, you shouldn't give alot of info about the characters let them be unexpected
Grammar: I think your grammar is pretty good but your writing style is a bit too easy to read sort of, I think you should try to upgrade your vocabulary, I suggest to consult an editor as editing really enhances the story and they might help you with vocabulary..
Summary :Only thing you need to improve is vocabulary and the blurb..the cover's your choice..I'm really impressed by the plot of the book... It's really unique.. Last tip: try to avoid repeating your words, example in chapter 1 the word promise is used multiple times.. Instead you can use words like vow, assure, guarantee, etc I hope that you are not offended by anything I wrote.. If any of the above things is hurtful.. Do forgive me..
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